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日本のバレンタインデーについて説明してみよう

Explaining Japan’s Valentine's Day
あなたは外国人に日本のバレンタインデーについて説明しているところです。
バレンタインに女性から男性にチョコレートを渡す文化が日本特有のものであることは有名です。他にも様々な違いがあるかもしれないので、聞いてみましょう。
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What kind of day is Valentine's Day in Japan?
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What kind of day is Valentine's Day in Japan?

Well, in my country, women or girl give something to men or boys. Mostly, the something is a chocolate. Moreover, the Valentine's Day is the day that women could take a chance to confess. Our country's Valentine's Day is on February 14th every year.
However, it is not only that giving some things from women to men, even between friends. It is called "Friendship chocolate". That sounds interesting right?

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Well, in my country, women or girls give something to men or boys. Mostly, that something is _ chocolate. Moreover, _ Valentine's Day is the day when women could take a chance to declare their feelings. Our country's Valentine's Day is on February 14_ every year.
However, it is not only women giving some things _ to men, it also happens between friends. It is called "Friendship chocolate". That sounds interesting, right?

1. Use the plural form
2. Relative pronoun to refer to "something"
3. "chocolate" is uncountable, so don't use the indefinite article "a"
4. Don't use the definite article "the" for general events or celebrations
5. Adverb to indicate "at or on which time"
6. Better verb usage
7. The Object of the verb, we "confess something" or "we declare something to someone"
8. No need to use the "st, nd, th" endings of ordinal numbers
9, 10. I changed the subject of the second clause for a better understanding of the idea
11. Instead of using "even", I used "also" which denotes "as well, additionally" to something previously mentioned
12. Use a comma, before ending, non-essential tag questions.
Yeah it really does, I'd like to be the one receiving a gift instead of always buying one for my wife. I like this culture. Have you ever received or given a gift on Valentine's day?

That sounds sweet though. I like another country's culture too which I could receive a chocolate or flowers.
When I was a high school student we changed a chocolate or any sweets with my friends. I don't know why, but we had to make the sweets by own hands. So, I was frantic the day after yesterday. Also, I gave to my ex boyfriend.

自然な表現

That sounds sweet though. I like other countries' cultures too, where I could receive _ chocolate or flowers.
When I was a high school student I exchanged _ chocolates or any sweets with my friends. I don't know why, but we had to make the sweets with our own hands. So, I was frantic the day before. Also, I used to give something to my ex-boyfriend.

1, 3. Use the plural form to refer to some others, as you are not only talking about one specific country
2. When using the possessive for "-s ending" plurals, just use the apostrophe
4. An adverb that makes reference to a place or situation
5. "chocolate" is uncountable, so don't use the indefinite article "a"
6. A subject that corresponds to yourself, as you mention "with MY friend" later on
7. Correct verb usage, to denote a mutual interchange
8. Use the plural form to refer to general nouns
9. This preposition indicates the instrument to perform the action
10. Use the possessive form of "our hands"
11. This was quite tricky to correct, the "day after yesterday" is today
12. This phrase indicates for a period of time, of your dating
13. The object for the verb "to give"
14. Hyphen these into one word
I believe handmade chocolates are sweeter than store bought ones. You know what the say, it's the thought that counts. Anyway, did you ex boyfriend like it?

You are right! That is the most important point. It doesn't matter how it looks like or what it is.
Yes, he did. I made a small chocolate cake then. I was really nervous before the day, and I tried making the cake three times. However, I succeeded it finally and the taste was also nice. So, I was glad to see that.

自然な表現

You are right! That is the most important factor. It doesn't matter how it looks like or what it is.
Yes, he did. I made a small chocolate cake at the time. I was really nervous before the day, and I tried making the cake three times. However, I finally got it and the taste was good. So, I was glad I could do that.

1. Better word usage. As there could be other factors into consideration. Use "point" when talking about a very vital idea
2. This phrase relates the events to a certain period of time
3. Use adverbs before verbs to give emphasis
4. This is a better verb usage, as it indicates you accomplished something
5. Correct adjective for 'taste'
6. You were happy before you were able to accomplish something, not because you only 'saw' it happening
Then you must have a natural talent in baking. I've never tried to bake anything before and I heard it's really difficult. But you got it on your third try! Anyway, is there a holiday or festival where women get gifts from men?

Thank you! It was a good experience for me.
Well, the day is called White Day which is on March 14th, one month later the Valentine's Day. I guess other counties are not this festival. The Day is for giving back to the person who gave something on the Valentine's Day.
We (women) are ready to receive a present anytime though!!

自然な表現

Thank you! It was a good experience for me.
Well, the day is called White Day which is on March 14_, one month after Valentine's Day. I guess other countries don't have this festival. The Day is to give back to the person who gave you something on _ Valentine's Day.
We -women- are ready to receive a present anytime though!!

1. No need to use the "st, nd, th" endings of ordinal numbers when the month is mentioned first
2. This preposition indicates "in the time following"
3. Correct spelling
4. Negative for the plural form of subjects
5. Correct verb usage, as "are" is not appropriate to describe possession (or in this case, celebration)
6. Use infinitive verbs to indicate a punctual action, rather than something habitual to do
7. Indirect Object for the verb "to give"
8. Don't use the definite article "the" for general events or celebrations
9. You can also use dashes to separate words into statements
Haha! Yes! Women can always accept gifts no matter when. So what was the best gift you received during White Day?

That’s it haha
Actually, I always received a chocolate, but the Godiva chocolate was the best!! It was the most impressive chocolate ever. Tastes was also nice, of course. However, to be honest, it really doesn’t matter what it is, I was glad his thought just like you said.

自然な表現

Yes, that's right! haha
Actually, I always received _ chocolates, but the Godiva chocolate was the best!! It was the most impressive chocolate ever; it tastes really good, of course. However, to be honest, it really doesn’t matter what it is, I was glad somebody thought about me, just like you said.

1. I think in a fluent conversation, this is would be more fitting as you agree with your interlocutor.
2. "chocolate" is uncountable, so don't use the indefinite article "a"
3. Use the plural form to refer to general nouns
4. When joining two short, related sentences, you can use a semicolon to separate the ideas
5. Correct personal pronoun for the verb "tastes", to refer to the previously mentioned chocolate
6. Appropriate adjective and adverb for 'taste'
7. Correct subject for the verb ' thought'. "His" is not a personal pronoun, so it cannot act as a subject
8. To complement the idea
9. Use a comma to set off explanatory segments of a statement
  • February 14th(2月14日)
  • return(お返し)
  • White Day(ホワイトデー )
  • St. Valentine's Day(バレンタインデー )
  • gift(贈り物、プレゼント)
  • Do you know giri-choko?(義理チョコって知っていますか?)
  • Women usually send men cards.(女性は男性にカードを贈ります。)
  • Valentine's Day isn't an event unique to Japan.(バレンタインデーは日本特有のイベントではない。)
  • Women give gifts to men on February 14th. (2月14日に女性が男性にプレゼントを渡します。)
  • Japanese confectionery companies created Valentine's Day. (日本のお菓子業界がバレンタインデーを作った。)

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