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担当している企業の投資価値について分析結果を説明しよう

Analysis Results.
あなたは担当している企業の投資価値について分析結果を説明しています。
投資先の候補は多くあり、特定の企業に投資するためにはその企業のリターンがどれだけ魅力的かを分析する必要があります。
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Please give us the analysis results concerning the investment value of the company you are in charge of.
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Please give us the analysis results concerning the investment value of the company you are in charge of.

We invested a "tZERO" company and now the company was one-fifth value when we invested because it has $60 million.
That reason is the company announces a deficit in the fiscal year meeting.
However, they invest a lot of money for the future.
We estimate the company's value will be 100 times than our investment timing because their product is very attractive from the following two points.
The first attractive point is their product can reduce the maintenance cost.
The second point is other companies can use it easily.
In conclusion, we need to wait for two years.

自然な表現

We invested a "tZERO" company and now the company was one-fifth value when we invested because it has $60 million.
That reason is the company announces a deficit in the fiscal year meeting.
However, they invest a lot of money for the future.
We estimate the company's value will be 100 times than our investment timing because their product is very attractive from the following two points.
The first attractive point is their product can reduce the maintenance cost.
The second point is other companies can utilize it easily.
In conclusion, we need to wait for two years.

1. Your sentences were all correct. However, you can alternatively use that verb.
Can you explain the reasons behind investing in this company? Can you tell me a bit more about the product?

Existing security exchanges pay money to third parties for settlement.
However, tZERO doesn't need to pay money, so the trading fee becomes down.
Moreover, existing security exchanges have 2days delay from buying to the settlement because third parties need to authenticate customer trades.
However, tZERO's blockchain technology can trade immediately because it can authenticate without third parties.
Then, who authenticate trading?
Blockchain technology has a decentralized system, so all participants authenticate our trades, so it secure and can't be tampered.
It is very revolutionary, so we think tZERO replaces the existing market.

自然な表現

Existing security exchanges pay money to third parties for settlement.
However, tZERO doesn't need to pay money, so the trading fee becomes lower.
Moreover, existing security exchanges have 2days delay from buying to the settlement because third parties need to authenticate customer trades.
However, tZERO's blockchain technology can trade immediately because it can authenticate without third parties.
Then, who authenticate trading?
Blockchain technology has a decentralized system, so all participants authenticate our trades, so it secure and can't be tampered.
It is very revolutionary, so we think tZERO replaces the existing market.

1. This is a better word choice.
You seem to know a lot about the analysis results of your company. How big is the market share of your product?.

My product's market is $1.6Trillion, so we will make $500million profit every year if we will get a 10% share of the market.
I think tZERO has the potential because of three reasons.
1st team members are chosen by very talented people because tZERO adopt persons who work for a big company.
2nd technology level is top by far because tZERO continues to improve its product for 5 years.
This is 3 times longer than other companies.
3rd the company has two important patents, so other competitors can't make the same exchange.

自然な表現

My product's market is $1.6Trillion, so we will make a $500million profit every year if we will get a 10% share of the market.
I think tZERO has the potential because of three reasons.
1st team members are chosen by very talented people because tZERO adopt persons who work for a big company.
2nd technology level is top by far because tZERO continues to improve its product for 5 years.
This is 3 times longer than other companies.
3rd the company has two important patents, so other competitors can't make the same exchange.

1. This determiner was missing in your sentence.
This seems like a big company. How many branches does your company have? Does the company have other branches outside your country?.

Yeah! My parent company is listing at NASDAQ, so the company is a big company.
However, my parent company doesn't have a branch because it does business only in the United States and my company is also.
By the way, I'd like to talk about the next investment company candidate.
The company is a start-up company, but it has already got $13 million.
An ordinary start-up company is a deficit, so this is an amazing event and they partnered some Japanese big companies.
I think this company will grow in the future.
What do you think?

自然な表現

Yeah! My parent company is listing at NASDAQ, so the company is a big company.
However, my parent company doesn't have a branch because it does business only in the United States and my company is also.
By the way, I'd like to talk about the next investment company candidate.
The company is a start-up company, but it has already got $13 million.
An ordinary start-up company is a deficit, so this is an amazing event and they partnered with some Japanese big companies.
I think this company will grow in the future.
What do you think?

1. This preposition was missing in this sentence.
I believe that you need to do a S.W.O.T (Strength / Weakness / Opportunities / Threats) analysis first in order to determine whether this company will succeed in the long run or not. So, pease tell me yours. What do you think are the strengths, weaknesses, opportunities, and threats this start-up company will face?

Thanks.
I analyzed a SWOT-analysis.
Strengths are their profit is surplus and already partnered Japanese big companies.
Weakness is they collected much money, so they have already a high valuation and they have only a few elites.
Opportunity is they are first-mover of the security token industry, so they can make rules.
Threats are their industry is still immature, so it takes too much time to become popular, and it may find bugs in their product.
I set a meeting, please discuss the above things, then we should decide whether to invest or not.

自然な表現

Thanks.
I analyzed a SWOT-analysis.
The strengths are their profit is surplus and already partnered Japanese big companies. The weakness is that they collected much money, so they have already a high valuation and they have only a few elites.
The opportunity is that they are first-mover of the security token industry, so they can make rules.
Threats are their industry is still immature, so it takes too much time to become popular, and it may find bugs in their product.
I set a meeting, please discuss the above things, then we should decide whether to invest or not.

1,2&3. This is a better and much clearer way to start your sentences.
  • cash flow(現金流量)
  • riskless (low risk) assets(安全資産)
  • present value(現在価値)
  • investment value(投資価値)
  • risky assets(危険資産)
  • The firm is in dire need of capital now due to financial distress.(その企業は財政危機に直面しているため、環境問題への解決策だ。)
  • The company’s market will remain underpinned by solid Japanese investor demand.(その会社の市場は、引き続き日本の投資家の安定した需要に支えられ好調であろう。)
  • In the case of low risk assets, it is difficult to grasp the investment value because future cash flow cannot be predicted.(危険資産の場合、将来のキャッシュフローが推測できないために投資価値の判断は困難である。)
  • In the case of low risk assets, such as bonds, it is relatively easy to figure out the investment value.(債券のような安全資産の場合、投資価値の把握は比較的容易である。)
  • The company has value worth investing in.(その会社は投資に値する価値を持っている。)

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