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新規事業に必要な資金とその調達方法について説明しよう

Fund Raising.
あなたは新規事業に必要な資金とその調達方法について説明しています。
新規事業のために新たな資金が必要な場合、借り入れをしたり、上場企業であれば株式や債券を発行してまかなうことが多いでしょう。それぞれの資本コストやその他のメリット・デメリットを明示するなど、聞き手が納得できる説明をできるようになりましょう。
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What do you think about the amount of funds necessary for the new business venture and the means of procuring such funds?
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What do you think about the amount of funds necessary for the new business venture and the means of procuring such funds?

I think we need to collect $60 million, so my proposal is more than my boss's because we should apply for the license of the national securities exchange.
Then, our company gets an income of more than $10 million per year, so our business becomes an advantage.
Nextly, I think that the best method of procuring is crowdfunding because we can get the synergy effect.
Big companies would like to invest our business because they can reduce the cost of maintenance innovatively if our business is succeeded.
Moreover, tax reform occurred this year and a venture investment deduction is applied.

自然な表現

I think we need to collect $60 million, so my proposal is more than my boss's because we should apply for the license of the national securities exchange.
Then, our company gets an income of more than $10 million per year, so our business gets an advantage.
Next, I think that the best method of procuring is crowdfunding because we can get the synergy effect.
Big companies would like to invest in our business because they can reduce the cost of maintenance innovatively if our business succeeds.
Moreover, tax reform occurred this year and a venture investment deduction is applied.

1. We "get" advantages from things.
2. More natural expression.
3. We invest "in" something.
4. The correct expression to refer to becoming successful.
So many things we should worry about and take into consideration. Where do we start? What is going to be our first step?

I think America is best because America passed a new law and our business gets advantages.
At first, we should get cooperation from more than 100 companies.
For it, we should take the following three actions.
1st we contact 5 companies per day and we express our business.
2nd we improve our product.
In detail, we need to increase the depositing ways.
Now, we accept only dollars but we need to accept bitcoin and other currencies.
3rd we get a "bit-license".
"bit-license" is important because we can buy and sell to NewYork citizens, so we can approach many customers.

自然な表現

I think America is best because America passed a new law and our business gets advantages.
At first, we should get cooperation from more than 100 companies.
For it, we should take the following three actions.
First, we contact 5 companies per day and we explain our business.
Second, we improve our product.
In detail, we need to increase the depositing options.
Now, we accept only dollars but we need to accept bitcoin and other currencies.
Third, we get a "bit-license".
"Bit-license" is important because we can buy and sell to NewYork citizens, so we can approach many customers.

1 3 & 5. More natural to spell out these words.
2. I believe this is what you want to express.
4. Use "options" to refer to other choices for depositing than just dollars.
Oh, okay, let's do the first thing first. Since you are good at talking to people, can you do that part? Is that okay with you? We can ask help from our trained marketers.

I see. I'd like to talk about this part, so I prepare the presentation slides.
Please tell me about the presentation time.
In detail, how long can I talk to people?
I think I can answer every question because I search for tZERO news every day for two years.
Therefore, I think I don't need to help others.

自然な表現

I see. I'd like to talk about this part, so I will prepare the presentation slides.
Please tell me about the presentation time.
In detail, how long can I talk to people?
I think I can answer every question because I have searched for tZERO news every day for two years.
Therefore, I think I don't need help from others.

1. Use "will" to refer to a future action.
2. Use the present perfect tense to refer to an action that began in the past and continues to now.
3. I believe this is what you want to express.
Great! You have twenty minutes to present our business proposal to each company. We'd like to see your presentation first before you contact those companies. What day and time are you available this week?

I'd like to confirm twenty minutes include question time. right?
12 minutes will be my presentation time and 8 minutes will be question time.
However, my schedule is filled with training organized by Human Resources for this week, so I make a presentation next Monday.
Could you see my presentation slides Tuesday morning?
Please adjust it to Human Resources if you must see it this week.
By the way, have the minutes of last week's meeting been already issued?
I'd like to see it because I couldn't participate in the meeting.

自然な表現

I'd like to confirm twenty minutes includes question time, right?
12 minutes will be my presentation time and 8 minutes will be question time.
However, my schedule is filled with training organized by Human Resources for this week, so I will make a presentation next Monday.
Could you see my presentation slides Tuesday morning?
Please adjust it with Human Resources if you must see it this week.
By the way, have the minutes of last week's meeting been already issued?
I'd like to see them because I couldn't participate in the meeting.

1. The subject is singular so use the singular verb.
2. Need a comma.
3. Use "will" to refer to a future action.
4. More appropriate preposition.
5. Use "them" to refer to plural "minutes".
Okay, you can allocate 8 minutes for question time. I will also review your slides Tuesday morning. Here is the copy of the minutes from last week. Do you have any other issues to clarify?

Thanks.
Wow!!
My boss decided to change the goal and organization.
I was assigned to another job, so I must go to the Silicon Valley office from next month.
My job contents are very very attractive because I can meet the venture capitalists as a new business founder.
My dream is to become a great venture capitalist, so I'm one step closer to a dream.
I'm very happy to get a new position.
I will hold a celebration party this evening.
Let's go-to drink at the usual drinking bar together.

自然な表現

Thanks.
Wow!!
My boss decided to change the goal and organization.
I was assigned to another job, so I must go to the Silicon Valley office from next month.
My job contents are very very attractive because I can meet the venture capitalists as a new business founder.
My dream is to become a great venture capitalist, so I'm one step closer to my dream.
I'm very happy to get a new position.
I will hold a celebration party this evening.
Let's go to drink at the usual drinking bar together.

1. Use "my" to refer to your dream.
  • means(手段)
  • deal(契約)
  • quote(見積もり)
  • put one's money down(資金を投じる)
  • business plan(事業計画)
  • Our products are unmatched in their quality and versatility.(私たちの製品はクオリティと柔軟さにおいて、肩をならべるものはありません。)
  • We have a number of investment companies and ties that are considering investment in new services.(私たちは新しいサービスへの出資を考えている複数の投資会社と繋がりがあります。)
  • In order to attract investment, we need to rethink the design and packaging of our products. (投資を受けるために、製品のデザインとパッケージを考え直す必要があります。)
  • Quite a few investment companies are considering to invest with us.(多くの投資会社が私たちへの投資を考えています。)
  • We need at least $3 million to start the new business venture.(新規事業には最低でも3万ドル必要です。)

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