ヨガの写真描写をしてみよう

Describe a picture of yoga
写真を見て内容の説明をしてください
今、女性の中で大人気のヨガです。ヨガの姿勢を写真描写するのは難しいかもしれませんが、是非チャレンジしてください!
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A girl who is practicing yoga asana. I love practicing yoga exercise, meditation, breathing exercise and more! Yoga affects me so much and influences my whole life.
I was constipated and inflexible. I had a cold constitution. I detected a strained body and muscle weakness. Everything is a work in progress.
We need to talk to our own body. Our body signals us in any ways how they are feeling. Practicing yoga can be sensitized it. That is a necessity part to get good result of yoga.

自然な表現

A girl who is practicing yoga asana. I love practicing yoga exercise, meditation, breathing exercise and more! Yoga affects me so much and influences my whole life.
I was constipated and inflexible. I had a cold constitution. I detected a strained body and muscle weakness. Everything is a work in progress.
We need to talk to our own bodies. Our bodies signal us in many ways how they are feeling. Practicing yoga can sensitize it. That is a necessity _ to get good results of yoga.

1.2 .'Our' implies plural form, it implies that you're referring to more than one body, so we need the plural form in both cases.
3. 'any' is not commonly used in this context, we usually use it in questions or negative statements. In this case, we could use 'many'.
4. The passive voice 'can be sensitized' doesn't fit here, and objects such as 'it' should not be used directly after the passive voice. We need the active voice since yoga is the subject that can sensitize our bodies. In the active voice, the subject (noun) performs an action (verb) on an object - I am driving a car. In the passive voice, the subject (noun) is acted upon (verb) by an object. - The car is driven by me. Use of active or passive voice depends on what you want to emphasize. Active voice emphasizes the subject doing the action; passive voice emphasizes the object receiving of the action. Passive form is structured like this: 'Subject+to be+past participle'.
5. The noun 'part' doesn't fit after the noun 'necessity', either remove it or use the adjective 'necessary'.
6. Either use plural 'results' which is more suitable for this context, the plural form is usually used when making general statements, or use an article before the noun phrase if you want to use the singular form.
Thank you so much for this detailed description of the importance of yoga. Can you describe the girl now? What does she look like? What is she wearing?

She is striking a pose which can describe her body situation about shoulder opening and hip opening. She is dressing in a camisole and sweat pants.
I'm crazy about yoga. I won't be able to stop loving it.
I can see the good result of yoga in my life such as energetic feeling, walking lively, elegant posture, and healing illnesses. Some people can see their good results when they play a sport such as throwing a ball, swing a club and running fast.
What do you think about yoga?

自然な表現

She is striking a pose which can describe her body situation as shoulder opening and hip opening. She is wearing a camisole and sweat pants.
I'm crazy about yoga. I won't be able to stop loving it.
I can see the good results of yoga in my life such as an energetic feeling, walking lively, elegant posture, and healing illnesses. Some people can see their good results when they play a sport such as throwing a ball, swing a club and running fast.
What do you think about yoga?

1. The preposition 'as' is needed, we say 'to describe something as something'.
2. 'dressing' doesn't fit here, we should use the verb 'wearing'. She got dressed before the photo was taken, and now she is wearing her clothes.
3. The plural form is needed, you listed more than one result.
4. 'energetic feeling' is singular and countable, so we should use an article before it.
How long have you been practicing Yoga? Who influenced you into it? What are the changes and improvements you have experienced so far?

It has been quite long time. My DNA pulled me into this world and my girlfriend cooperated to learn yoga with me.
I can see the yoga effects as I said energetic feeling, walking lively, elegant posture, and healing illnesses.

自然な表現

It has been quite a long time. My DNA pulled me into this world and my girlfriend cooperated to learn yoga with me.
I can see the yoga effects, as I said, an energetic feeling, walking lively, elegant posture, and healing illnesses.

1. 'long time' is singular and countable, so we should use an article before it.
2. 3. A comma is needed on both sides of the interrupting phrase 'as I said'.
4. 'energetic feeling' is singular and countable, so we should use an article before it.
  • concentrate your mind(集中する)
  • get ready(準備する)
  • fold your arms(腕を曲げる)
  • relax your mind(心を落ち着かせる)
  • give a jerk(急に動かす)
  • I'm very comfortable.(とても気持ちがよいです。)
  • I think this will look good on you.(これが似合うのかなと思いました。)
  • I think she is an instructor.(彼女はインストラクターだと思います。)
  • It is said that yoga can cause weight loss through the relieving of stress.(ヨガはストレスを解消させることでダイエット効果があるとされています。)
  • You should not over-exert yourself during exercises.(エクササイズでは、無理をしないようにしましょう。)

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