今の日本の学校教育の問題について自分の考えを伝えてみよう

Talking about the educational system in Japan
あなたは同僚と今の日本の学校教育のシステムについて話しています。
日本の学校教育のシステムはどういった点で諸外国と異なるのでしょうか?優れた点、改善すべき点などについて話してみましょう。
What do you think about the educational system in Japan?
 
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What do you think about the educational system in Japan?

The educational system in Japan is quite excellent. Japanese high-schoolers reading scores came third among 81 countries in the Program for International Student Assessment survey for 2022. The survey has been performed to assess how much 15-year-old students obtained knowledge and skills through their compulsory education. In general, reading comprehension is strongly connected to that of mathematics. Also, people can only understand human studies correctly through reading comprehension. Japanese education prioritizes developing thinking ability rather than rote memorization.

自然な表現

The educational system in Japan is quite excellent. Japanese high-schoolers reading scores ranked third among 81 countries in the Program for International Student Assessment survey for 2022. The survey has been performed to assess how much 15-year-old students obtained knowledge and skills through their compulsory education. In general, reading comprehension is strongly connected to that of mathematics. Also, people can only understand human studies correctly through reading comprehension. Japanese education prioritizes developing the ability to think rather than rote memorization.

1. Use "ranked" here which is defined as - to have a specified rank or place within a grading system.
2. I rephrased this part for a natural sentence flow.
High reading scores in Program for International Student Assessment (PISA) is highly be attributed to educational systems. Reading comprehension is very important in almost everything we do. How would you describe Japanese school curriculum?

Japanese school curricula are putting efforts into logical reading and writing to develop thinking ability. I've often seen that high school graduates from countries with high reading comprehension are superior to university graduates from countries with low reading comprehension. The latter needs help understanding the directions. Also, compulsory Japanese education shows students that what they learn is connected to their daily lives. Nevertheless, some Japanese people complain that the curricula should be practical. They are wrong. They can't apply what they learned to my future life. However, there is a problem that Japanese education is biased and leaning too progressive.

自然な表現

Japanese school curricula are putting efforts into logical reading and writing to develop thinking skills. I've often seen that high school graduates from countries with high reading comprehension are superior to university graduates from countries with low reading comprehension. The latter need help understanding directions. Also, compulsory Japanese education shows students that what they learn is connected to their daily lives. Nevertheless, some Japanese people complain that the curricula should be practical. They are wrong. They can't apply what they learned to their future lives. However, the problem is that Japanese education is biased and learning is too progressive.

1. You can use "skills" here to be natural.
2. Use a plural verb with the plural noun "graduates".
3. Use the plural determiner "their" since the subject is the plural pronoun "they".
4. Use the plural noun "lives" here to refer to more than one person's life.
5. Spelling correction.
Developing students' thinking abilities is essential as it makes them independent thinkers. Education should give students a theoretical basis and the necessary life skills; it cannot provide solutions for each life situation. Therefore, I don't agree with those people. How do Japanese students compare with students from other countries?

That's right. For example, people who want abilities to type fast and create websites should learn in vocational school, not compulsory education or universities. Liberal arts and literacy should be significant. Japanese students are excellent, as far as I've seen. The problem is that Japanese education teaches only evolution. Creationism must be scientific. People often judge a matter whether it has scientific evidence. In the name of science, there are events in violence that have been justified in history. Even in the modern world, such a thing might have happened during the pandemic. Science needs ethics.

自然な表現

That's right. For example, people who want abilities to type fast and create websites should learn in vocational schools, not compulsory education or universities. Liberal arts and literacy should be significant. Japanese students are excellent, as far as I've seen. The problem is that Japanese education teaches only evolution. Creationism must be scientific. People often judge a matter based on whether it has scientific evidence. In the name of science, there are events in violence that have been justified in history. Even in the modern world, such a thing might have happened during the pandemic. Science needs ethics.

1. Use the plural "vocational schools" to generalize.
2. Use "based on" here. If you base something on facts or ideas, you use those facts or ideas to develop it.
3. Here is an alternative expression: "requires".
  • problem(問題)
  • education(教育)
  • decline(低下)
  • points to be improved(改善すべき点)
  • heavy burden(大きな負担)
  • Unstable household environments have a negative effect on how students react in a school environment.(不安定な家庭環境は、学校環境での生徒の反応に悪影響を及ぼします。)
  • Another problem is the collapse of classroom discipline and an increase in school violence.(もう一つの問題は、学級崩壊と校内暴力です。)
  • Government contribution toward education is very low, and many educational institutions are declining in number.(教育に対する政府の関与が少なく、多くの教育機関が衰退しています。)
  • One problem is that more and more students lack the motivation and initiative to learn these days.(一つの問題は、近ごろ学習意欲と主体性に乏しい生徒が増えてきていることです。)
  • Due to the heavy burden of teachers, many of them are suffering from mental problems.(教師の負担が大きいため、精神的な問題を抱えている人も少なくありません。)

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