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歴史の人物について話そう

Talking about a famous historical person
あなたは、歴史上の人物について話しています。
自国、他国の文化とその背景に関する知識を持ち、それについて話し合いましょう。
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Who is your favorite historical person?
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Who is your favorite historical person?

I want you to know Dr,Nakamura Testsu who had medical doctor license.
He engaged in Afghanistan for over 40 years, dedicated as a medical doctor, cultivated the land and get a lot of water into these area. He usually said that even there is water, we can save human life. He took affect and cultivate a lot of people in Afghanistan. But he has just been killed by some terrorists. Although I feel very his soul is there through some people he cultivated.

自然な表現

I want you to know Dr, Nakamura Testsu who had a medical doctor license.
He was engaged in Afghanistan for over 40 years, dedicated as a medical doctor, cultivated the land and got a lot of water into these areas. He usually said that even there is water, we can save human life. He took effect and cultivated a lot of people in Afghanistan. He was killed by some terrorists. Although I feel his very soul is there through some people he cultivated.
 

1. Add the article "a" before the word "medical" because an article always introduces a noun or an adjective.
2. Add the verb "was" before the word "engaged" because "was" is used in first person and third person narrative.
3. Replace the word present participle "get" with the past participle "got" which is in agreement with words in this phrase.
4. The plural demonstrative "these" is modifying the singular noun "area". Change the singular to "areas".
5. The correct spelling is "effect".
6. The word order in the phrase "But he has just been killed by some terrorists" is in the wrong word order.
7. The correct word order is "his very soul" not "very his soul".
This is a terrible loss. I am so sorry to know about that. He has earned a place of great respect in my heart. How do you know about Dr. Nakamura Testsu?

When we search the word "Dr.Nakamura Tetsu" in internet now, only some tragedy news are appeared. But you can see his initiative by searching name in the Youtube. I could come to know in depth by it. He is not a historical person, but a current contributed person. His activities can give some courage to human. I will know more about him.

自然な表現

When we search the word "Dr.Nakamura Tetsu" on the internet now, only some tragic news appears. But you can see his initiative by searching his name on Youtube. I could come to know in-depth about it. He is not a historical person, but a person with current contributions. His activities can give some courage to humans. I will know more about him.


 

1. Exchange the preposition "in" with the preposition "on" which is the most suitable preposition to use in this phrase.
2. The article "the" is missing before the noun "internet" because an article always introduces a noun or an adjective.
3. The word "tragedy" does not work well with the words in this context, change it to "tragic".
4. Remove the verb "are" from this sentence, because it is redundant.
5. Replace the past participle "appeared" with the present participle "appears".
6. Replace preposition "in" with "on" which is most suitable in this phrase.
7. Add the hyphen between words "in depth" to combine them.
8. The correct word order is "He is not a historical person, but a person with current contributions."
9. 9. The word "human" does not agree in number with the other words in this phrase, change it to "humans".
I just looked up the name. You are right, Google is showing all tragic news for this search. I learned that he was awarded the Magsaysay Prize for international peace and understanding. Isn't that impressive?

I have not known he got the prize long time ago. I am proud of him.
And I will introduce you Shotoku Taishi who established the first lows at the beginning of history in Japan. His background is very like Jesus Christ.
He was born in house house and his mother's name is Maria. They say these might be transmitted from the bible. And he made a system that Buddhism and Shinto which is Japanese continuous dynasty religion was combined. Therefore the struggle was rarely in Japanese history.

自然な表現

I did not know he got the prize a long time ago. I am proud of him.
And I will introduce you to Shotoku Taishi who established the first laws at the beginning of history in Japan. His background is very much like Jesus Christ.
He was born in a house and his mother's name is Maria. They say these might be transmitted from the bible. And he made a system that Buddhism and Shinto which is the Japanese continuous dynasty religion were combined. Therefore the struggle was rarely in Japanese history.

1. The correct phrase to use is "l did not know" not "l have not known" in this phrase.
2. Add the preposition "to" before the noun "Shotoku Taishi".
3. The correct spelling is "laws".
4. The natural expression is "very much like".
5. Add the article "a" before the noun "house" because an article always introduces a noun or an adjective.
6. Repetition of the word "house" remove the second one.
7. Add the article "the" before the noun "Japanese" because an article always introduces a noun or an adjective.
8. The verb form "was" is not in agreement with the words in this phrase, change it to "were".
Oh okay. So, Shotoku Taishi is the region behind the peaceful relationship between the followers of Buddhism and Shinto. Are these two religions very different from each other?

Yes, the religion, as it were, is a way to be happiness.
 The way is so different, Buddhism requires some training which give their body pains, sitting for some hours and stop in standing. On the other hand Shinto needs reading god's words, there are a lot of gods. Each nature has a god.
It is miracle to combine these.

自然な表現

Yes, the religion, as it were, is a way to be happy.
 The way is so different, Buddhism requires some training which gives their body pains, sitting for some hours and stop in standing. On the other hand, Shinto needs reading god's words, there are a lot of gods. Each nature has a god.
It is a miracle to combine these.
 

1. The word "happiness" does not agree with the words in this context, change it to "happy".
2. The plural verb "give" does not agree with the singular subject "some training".
3. There is a missing comma after the introductory phrase "On the other hand". An introductory phrase is always followed by a comma.
4. Add the missing article "the" before the noun "miracle" because an article always introduces a noun or an adjective.
Yes, indeed it is a miracle. So, Shinto is a traditional religion, just like Hinduism. In Hinduism, there are many gods. Have you heard about this religion?

Yes, I've. Hinduism is from India. There are a lot of stories, and I read one of them that is struggle with two countries. A flying vehicle and some bombs were appeared.
I remember that is very strange.
Some professional said an atomic bomb was explained, and it was said that in fact there are some antiquities that burned by high fever.

自然な表現

Yes, I have. Hinduism is from India. There are a lot of stories, and I read one of them that is a struggle with two countries. A flying vehicle and some bombs appeared.
I remember that is very strange.
Some professionals said an atomic bomb was explained, and it was said that in fact there are some antiquities that burned by high fever.
 

1. The correct word is "l have".
2. You used the intransitive verb "were appeared" in a passive voice construction. Write the sentence in active voice "appeared".
  • politics(政治、政治の)
  • intriguing(興味深い)
  • era(時代・年代)
  • influential(影響力の大きい)
  • overseas(海外,海外で)
  • My dissertation for the graduation project was about 〜(卒業プロジェクトの最終論文は〜について書きました。)
  • be motivated by 〜(〜により、モチベーションがある)
  • despite the fact that 〜(〜とういう事実にもかかわらず)
  • There are many unique aspects of Japanese history(日本には多くの独特な歴史がある)
  • If I could travel through time, I would like to 〜(もしタイムトラベルできたら、〜したい)

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