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学生時代の友人について話してみよう

Talking about your old schoolmates
学生時代の友人について説明してみましょう。あなたが記載した回答に対して、この後講師がどんどん質問していきます。
友人との思い出から、当時の学校生活など話をふくらませることができるといいですね。
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What were your old schoolmates like?
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What were your old schoolmates like?

I have a best friend since I was kid. Because my mother and her mother are friend. We have been each house very often. When we went to elementary school, we are same class. After school we climbed trees, practice to ride a unicycle, roller blade and talked every thing about to my joy to be sad. 2 days ago, we went to eat lunch near cafeteria and spent good time with her. We have similar backgrounds so we are similar feeling or thinking.I have been living in Thai but we have been fried each other even if another place.

自然な表現

I have had a best friend since I was a kid. Because my mother and her mother are friends. We have been in each house very often. When we went to elementary school, we are in the same class. After school we climbed trees, practiced to ride a unicycle, roller blade and talked every thing about _ my joy to be sad. 2 days ago, we went to eat lunch near cafeteria and spent good time with her. We have similar backgrounds so we have similar feeling or thinking. I have been living in Thailand but we have been friends with each other even if in another place.

1. We need the present perfect tense here, we can use to talk about something that started in the past and continues in the present: She has lived in Paris for ten years. The present perfect is formed from the present tense of the verb 'have' and the past participle of a verb (subject+have/has+past participle).
2. 'Kid' is a singular noun, so we need an article here.
3. You're talking about two people so we need the plural noun here.
4. The preposition of place 'in' is needed here.
5. Again, we need the preposition 'in' and the article 'the'. 'Same' is usually referring to something specific, so it takes the definite article 'the' when it comes before a noun. Generally, it comes after "the," "this," "that," "these," or "those"
6. You're talking about past, so we need the past tense here.
7. The preposition 'to' is not needed here in this context after another preposition 'about'.
8. The verb 'have' should be used in this context, because feelings and thinking is something we 'have', rather that something we 'are'.
9. 'Thai' is typically used as an adjective or name for a person from Thailand or the language they speak there, the name of the country in English is Thailand.
10. I assume you wanted to use 'friends' here.
11. The preposition 'with' is needed here to connect the noun 'friends' with the object 'each other'.
12. The preposition of place 'in' is needed here because you're referring to a place.
I'm happy to know that you are enjoying your school and spending some enjoyable time with your good friend.
You remind me of my childhood when finding a tree laden with fruit was my kind of pure joy.
You are in Thailand now?

Yes, I am in Thai with my parents and sisters. My friend haven’t been to Thai so that I hope she goes to visit us someday.
Now I am coming back to Japan 10days. Because we are renovating our house now. And I help them. Before my oldest sister’s family stayed our house but they moved. So my parents said It was chance to renovate our house. This morning a paperhanger come my house. We will change every door’s paper and Tatami that is traditional straw mats. Usually Japanese stile house is built by woods and paper or straw.

自然な表現

Yes, I am in Thailand with my parents and sisters. My friend hasn’t been to Thailand so that I hope she goes to visit us someday.
Now I am coming back to Japan for 10_days. Because we are renovating our house now. And I help them. Before my oldest sister’s family stayed in our house but they moved. So my parents said it was chance to renovate our house. This morning a paperhanger came to my house. We will change every door’s paper and Tatami that is traditional straw mat. Usually Japanese style house is built from woods and paper or straw.

1. Check the previous paragraph, correction 9.
2. Subjects and verbs must agree with one another in number and form (singular or plural). So, if a subject is singular, its verb must also be singular; if a subject is plural, its verb must also be plural. Singular verbs are formed by adding 's' at the end. In this case the subject 'friend' is singular, so the verb must be singular too. 'Have-plural'; 'Has-singular'.
3. Check the previous paragraph, correction 9.
4. A preposition is needed here, we should use 'for' or 'in' depending on the context.
5. Spacing is needed between numbers and words.
6. The preposition 'in' is needed here to connect the verb 'stayed' with the object 'our house'.
7. Capitalization not needed here, the pronoun 'it' is not starting the sentence.
8. You're talking about something that happened in the time before now, in the recent past, so we need the past tense here.
9. The preposition 'to' is needed here to connect the verb 'came' with the object 'my house'.
10. 'that is' implies you're talking about one thing, singular form, so we need the singular noun 'mat' here.
11. Proper spelling of the word 'style'.
12. The preposition 'from' should be used here because you're referring to materials. Use 'by' to refer to people who made the house - Usually Japanese style house is built by constructors from woods and paper or straw.
Oh, alright. How long do you think it will take to complete this renovation? What are your other plans for the future?

I think it will take to complete this renovation for 2 months so that my parents stay here during renovate it. We have to change new kitchen and bathroom. So I am busy everyday doing staying in Japan. But I have to come back to Thai in 7th May for work.

自然な表現

I think it will take 2 months to complete this renovation so that my parents stay here during renovation. We have to change a new kitchen and bathroom. So I am busy every day during staying in Japan. But I have to come back to Thailand on 7th of May for work.

1. '2 months' should come directly after the verb 'take'.
2. 'Renovate' is a verb but we need a noun here, we should use 'renovation'.
3. 'new kitchen' is a singular phrase, so we need an article here.
4. 'Everyday' is an adjective we use to describe something that’s seen or used every day. It means “ordinary” or “typical.” (Eating breakfast is my everyday routine).
'Every day' is a phrase that simply means “each day.” (I eat breakfast every day). In your case we need 'every day'.
5. The word 'doing' doesn't seem to fit the context, we cannot say 'doing staying', I assume you wanted to use the word 'during', we could also use 'while'.
6. Check the paragraph 2, correction 9.
7. For dates we should use the preposition 'on'. 'In' is used for months.
8. The preposition 'of' is needed here.
Oh, I see. So, you are currently working in Thailand. How about your childhood friend? Do you also communicate with each other through SNS?

I talk with my childhood friends just when I come back to Japan.
But For my another Japanese friends who have known in Thai, we communicate through SNS.
I went to visit her in Ehime prefecture and Osaka prefecture by bus 3 years ago.It takes 9 hours from my house in Japan. I am happy to have friends who stay in another prefecture because I can travel there.

自然な表現

I talk with my childhood friends just when I come back to Japan.
But for my other Japanese friends who I have known in Thailand, we communicate through SNS.
I went to visit her in Ehime prefecture and Osaka prefecture by bus 3 years ago.It takes 9 hours from my house in Japan. I am happy to have friends who stay in another prefecture because I can travel there.

1. Capitalization not needed, 'for' comes after a comma and it's not starting the sentence.
2. Use 'another' (an other) only with singular nouns, 'friends' is plural so we need 'other'.
3. Subject is needed here. You're talking about your friends so use 'I'.
4. Check the paragraph 2, correction 9.
You are right. It is good to have friends from another or different places because it is so easy and convenient to roam around their place since you will have an instant tour guide.

That’s why I want to make friends who come from another country.
I think I learned from friends so much. They cheer my goal encourage me so that I remain stay in Thai. I want to go to SKE school to be missionary. More studying the Bible, more teaching people well. I will go back to Thai again and study English and Thai, study the Bible, work at the Hotel. I can do my best because of my friends who cheer me and my family. I appreciate them and I want to be a good friend for them too.

自然な表現

That’s why I want to make friends who come from another country.
I think I learned from friends so much. They cheer my goal and encourage me so that I remain _ in Thailand. I want to go to SKE school to be a missionary. More studying the Bible, more teaching people well. I will go back to Thailand again and study English and Thai, study the Bible, work at the hotel. I can do my best because of my friends who cheer me and my family. I appreciate them and I want to be a good friend for them too.

1. The coordinating conjunction 'and' is needed here
2. 'Stay' is redundant here, either use 'remain' or 'stay' alone but not both.
3. Check the paragraph 2, correction 9.
4. 'Missionary' is a singular noun, so we need an article here.
5. Check the paragraph 2, correction 9.
6. Capitalization not needed here, this doesn't seem to be a proper noun.
  • feel a longing to do~(~したいと強く願う)
  • the school song (校歌)
  • keep in contact with~(~と連絡を取り続ける)
  • the class reunion(同窓会)
  • belong to~(~に所属する)
  • look back upon~(~を振り返る)
  • I suppose we will be able to meet again after a year or so.(また1~2年後には集まることができそうです。)
  • The alumni meeting ended with everyone singing the school song together.(同窓会は校歌の大合唱で終わりました。)
  • Do you keep in contact with your high school classmates?(高校時代にクラスメイトと連絡をとっていますか。)
  • I think class reunions are very important because we can look back upon our adolescence and feel relaxed.(同窓会は本当に重要ですよ。だって青春時代を振り返ることができますし,リラックスできますしね。)
  • I belonged to the golf club in my high school days.(私は高校時代ゴルフクラブに属していました。)

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