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My husband and I went on a trip with my parents-in-low last weekend. We went to Shizuoka, which is located in the middle between Tokyo and Osaka, by the way. We stayed a hotel within a national park area. From the window, we could see Mt. Fuji, which is the most famous mountain in Japan, and a beautiful lake together. The hotel is in the middle of nowhere, so the only thing we could do was relaxing. We hiked around the lake early in the morning, and we even saw many fireflies at night! It was so cool and beautiful!
My husband and I went on a trip with my parents-in-law last weekend. We went to Shizuoka, which is located between Tokyo and Osaka, by the way. We stayed at a hotel within a national park area. From the window, we could see Mt. Fuji, which is the most famous mountain in Japan, and a beautiful lake together. The hotel was in the middle of nowhere, so the only thing we could do was relax. We hiked around the lake early in the morning, and we even saw many fireflies at night! It was so cool and beautiful!
Hiking around a lake is still the best! Although there are five lakes around Mt. Fuji, which are natural pounds, the lake nearest the hotel is man made lake in 1930s. Promenades near the hotel are well-organized and there are many animals there. Many kinds of birds sang songs during hiking. Sounds of wind were pleasant. I felt it liked a ambient sound. We enjoyed hiking more than one and half an hour. It was the most enjoyable moment of the trip.
Hiking around a lake is still the best! Although there are five lakes around Mt. Fuji, which are natural ponds, the lake nearest the hotel is a man-made lake built in the 1930s. Promenades near the hotel are well-organized, and there are many animals there. Many kinds of birds sang during our hike. The sound of the wind was pleasant. I felt like it was an ambient sound. We enjoyed hiking for more than an hour and a half. It was the most enjoyable moment of the trip.
2. 'Man-made lake' is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article 'a'.
3. Join the two words with a hyphen to show they function as a single descriptive unit.
4. Add 'built' to clarify how the lake came to exist.
5. Decades are treated as specific, definite periods of time in English, so they require the definite article.
6. Use a comma (,) before a coordinating conjunction that links independent clauses.
7. A more natural phrasing would be 'many kinds of birds sang' or 'many kinds of birds were singing' during the hike, without repeating 'songs'.
8. Use 'our hike' because 'during' should be followed by a noun phrase referring to a specific event.
9. 'Sound' is typically used in the singular with 'the' in this context.
10. 'Wind' here refers to a specific instance of wind that was present during the hike (not wind in general), so it takes the definite article 'the'.
11. Use 'was' to agree with the singular subject 'sound'.
12. Use 'like' as a preposition meaning 'similar to', along with 'was' to complete the clause correctly.
13. 'Ambient' begins with a vowel sound and requires the article 'an'.
14. Add the preposition 'for' to indicate duration.
15. The standard phrase is 'an hour and a half'.
Unfortunately, we didn't take any photos of the fireflies because fireflies lights are very weak without flush. I heard that camera flush is bad for fireflies, so I just burned them into my memory. We took many pictures except fireflies. I used to prefer to enjoy a trip without camera, but currently I've changed my mind. I take many pictures and look back by digital photo frame in my living room. Sometimes those pictures remind us of our those happy trips.
Unfortunately, we didn't take any photos of the fireflies because firefly light is very weak without a flash. I heard that a camera flash is bad for fireflies, so I just committed them to memory. We took many pictures of everything except the fireflies. I used to prefer to enjoy a trip without a camera, but now I've changed my mind. I take many pictures and look back at them on a digital photo frame in my living room. Sometimes those pictures remind us of those happy trips.
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3. Add 'a' before 'flash' since it's a singular countable noun here.
4. 6. 'Flash' is the correct word for the burst of light a camera produces.
5. Add 'a' before 'camera flash' since it refers to one specific type of light burst being discussed.
7. The phrase is more commonly used in the passive form, as in 'it's burned into my memory', describing something that happens naturally and vividly, rather than as a deliberate action someone chooses to do. Since your sentence frames it as something you actively chose to do instead of taking photos, a slightly more natural phrasing would be 'I just committed them to memory', which better conveys a deliberate act.
8. Add 'of everything' to clarify what the pictures were of.
9. Add 'the' since it refers back to the specific fireflies already mentioned.
10. Add the article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'camera'.
11. 'Now' pairs more naturally with 'I've changed my mind' in this contrasting structure with 'used to'.
12. Add 'at them' because 'look back' needs an object to refer to.
13. Photos are viewed 'on' a screen or frame.
14. Add 'a' before 'digital photo frame' as a singular countable noun.
15. Only one determiner can precede a noun in this position, so 'our' should be removed.
You're doing great! Enjoy your speaking lesson!
関連単語
- fantastic（すばらしい）
- railroad trip（鉄道旅行）
- a solitary journey（一人旅）
- by plane（飛行機で）
- for the first time in my life（人生初の）
- a sightseeing spot（観光スポット）
- an outlook（視野）
- region（地域）
- a prefecture（県）
- an area（地域）
- local people（地元の人々）
関連フレーズ
- The trip was fantastic.（旅行はとってもよかったよ。）
- I went on a railroad trip.（電車に乗って行ってきました。）
- This was my first plane trip.（今回はじめて飛行機に乗りました。）
- I traveled abroad for the first time in my life.（人生で初めて海外旅行に行ってきました。）
- I went to some famous sightseeing spots such as the Eiffel Tower.（エッフェル塔などの有名な観光地にも行きました。）
- Through my trip, I broadened my outlook.（今回の旅で、私は自分の視野を広げることができました。）
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2. 'Between' already conveys the idea of being in the middle, so 'in the middle' should be removed.
3. 'Stay' requires 'at' when followed by a place.
4. Use 'was' to stay consistent with the past tense used throughout the story.
5. After the pattern 'the only thing we could do was', the base form of the verb (not the '-ing' form) is the standard structure.