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動物病院でペットの診察をお願いしよう

Having your pet checked by a veterinarian
大切に飼っているペットの体調がすぐれないときはとても心配になりますね。しかし、いつも一緒に居る飼い主さんだからこそ、気づくことの出来るちょっとした容態の変化です。獣医さんに診てもらうときは、なるべく詳しく容態の変化や病気症状のを伝えることによって、的確な診察を受けれます。今後の見通しも含めて獣医さんとお話しましょう!
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Hello, how can I help you, today?

My dog had eaten a cannabis accidentally last night. This looks bad feeling. How should I do this?

自然な表現

My dog ate cannabis accidentally last night. It looks like he's feeling badWhat should I do about this?

1. You should use a verb in the past simple tense in this context.
2. Since this is an uncountable noun, you shouldn't use the indefinite article before it.
3. This is another, clearer way of saying the same thing.
4. You can use this as an alternative.
5. You should add this so that the sentence is complete and clear.
I understand. How much cannabis did the dog eat? How did your dog feel today? Did you notice anything strange in your dog's behavior?

I am not sure, my dog can't walk properly. It was my fault because I got cannabis from my curiosity. Afterward, I did cannabis then I slept for long time. During that time, my dog have got it.

自然な表現

I am not sure, but my dog can't walk properly. It was my fault because I got cannabis out of my curiosity. Afterward, I took cannabis then I slept for a long time. During that time, my dog got it.

1. You can add a conjunction so that the two parts of the sentence are better connected.
2. and 3. This should be used instead so that the sentence is clearer.
4. An indefinite article should be used before countable nouns in the singular form.
5. The tense that fits the context of the sentence the best is the past simple tense.
Let's first check it. How long has it been since your last visit to the vet? Does he have any allergies?

Why do you call the dog for he? You should be call this or that and so on because dog is not human. I learned we shouldn't call animals like human. By the way, it doesn't have any allergies.

自然な表現

Why do you use the pronoun 'he' when you refer to the dog? You should use 'this' or 'that' and so on because dogs aren't human. I learned we shouldn't call animals like we call humans. By the way, it doesn't have any allergies.

1. In order to avoid any possible confusion, you can use this variation.
2. This is a shorter, simpler alternative that can be used.
3. 4. 5. and 6. You can also use quotation marks here.
7. Since you're talking about dogs in general, not one specific dog, you should use the plural form.
8. You can add this so that you are even more specific.
9. This word should be in the plural form since you're referring to all humans, not one specific human.
Oh, it's a new trend to refer to a pet as she or he. So it's accepted. It's good that it doesn't have any allergies. I am going to prescribe some medicine. You can put it in his food. Will that be okay?

I see. I can learn new something. Yes, sounds good. On a different note, have you ever use cannabis? Using cannabis is being legally in many countries recent years. Do you think about the movement? Can you agree as a doctor?

自然な表現

I see. I can learn something new. Yes, that sounds good. On a different note, have you ever used cannabis? Using cannabis is legal in many countries in recent years. What do you think about the movement? Can you agree as a doctor?

1. This word order should be used in this context.
2. You can add this so that the sentence is even clearer.
3. Since you used the present perfect tense, this form of the verb is needed here.
4. This is a simpler, shorter and clearer variation that should be used instead.
5. and 6. This should be added so that the sentence is complete.
I have never used cannabis before but I agree that more and more countries are legalizing it. I am in support of this, how about you?

I see. Actually, I have to say yes or no about that issue. Because, researching cannabis is on the way. We have to wait what is effect it for our health to use for a long time.

自然な表現

I see. Actually, I don't have an opinion about that issue because researching cannabis is still happening. We have to wait to discover what effect it has on our health if we use it for a long time.

1. 3. 4. and 5. This is a clearer alternative that can be used instead.
2. You can connect these two sentences. Also, a comma isn't needed here.
6. You should add this so that the sentence is clear.
7. The verb you used requires an object afterward.

Great job! :)
  • weight loss(体重減少)
  • labored breathing (呼吸困難)
  • prevention(予防)
  • symptoms(症状)
  • stay healthy(健康でいてください)
  • I think that my pet ate something inedible and since then my pet has seemed sick.(なにか食べれないものを食べてしまって、それから体調を崩してしまっているようです。)
  • My pet has not been eating anything for three days.(私のペットはこの3日間何も食べていない。)
  • The physical appearance of my pet has changed over the past several weeks.(ここ数週間でペットの容姿が変化した。)
  • I have noticed that 〜(〜に気づいた。)
  • be showing the signs of excessively drinking water.(水の過剰摂取の症状があります。)

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