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現在の心配事について話してみよう

Worrying about something
あなたは、現在の心配事について話しています。
何か気がかりなこと、心配事は日常生活の中にあります。話を聞いてもらうだけではなくて、解決策などもしっかりと話し合えるようにしておきましょう。
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What things make you feel worried?
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What things make you feel worried?

I've had a cold for a week. What should I do to get over this sickness? Do you think I should drink a cup of Youmeishu every night?
My sister has told me that if I take a breath through mouth, I would get sick easily rather than breathing through a nose. I will stick a tape on my mouth when I get sleep to prevent breathing through mouth tonight. Perhaps I tended to take a breath mouth lately.
I've heard that the name of the drink is eggnog which is drunk when people get sick, isn't it?

自然な表現

I caught a cold its a week now. What should I do to get over this sickness? Do you think I should drink a cup of Youmeishu every night?
My sister told me that if I take a breath through the mouth, I will get sick easily rather than breathing through a nose. I will stick tape on my mouth when I go to sleep to prevent breathing through the mouth tonight. Perhaps I tended to take a breath mouth lately.
I heard that eggnog is the drink that you take when you get sick. Isn't it?
 

1. The correct way of writing the sentence which refers to something that happened before.
2. The word 'had' you used is not necessary.
3. You missed an article 'the' before the word mouth. Add the article to correct grammar.
4. The correct word to use is 'will' because it states that you will be sick.
5&6. The correct way of writing the sentence.
I am sorry to hear about your health. I wish you a speedy recovery. What is Youmeishu? I have never heard of it.

It is a sake that is infused with herbs and drunk for its medicinal qualities as medicine.
It contains 14 effective nutritional herbal medicines.
I thought that eggnog is as medical purposed as youmeishu though it is a drink for when having Christmas, isn't it?
Do you have a culture likewise drinking alcohol for medicinal purposes?

自然な表現

It is a sack that is infused with herbs that you drink as a medicine.
It contains 14 effective nutritional herbal medicines.
I thought that eggnog medical purposes are as youmeishu though it is a drink you have for Christmas. Isn't it?
Do you have a culture likewise drinking alcohol for medicinal purposes?
 

1. The word 'sake' means 'for the purpose of'. The word that you can consider to use is 'sack'.
2&3. The correct and clear way of writing the sentence.
No, we do not have such a culture in my country. So don't you end up getting drunk when you drink the alcohol?

I get drunk, but I'm not sure how many glasses of alcohol make me getting drunk.

And also I've heard that before my grandmother's era they used a leak for a natural remedy. When they caught a cold, they wrapped the leak with a towel then put it around one's neck like a scarf. I've never done it so I'm not really sure if it would be effective or not.

自然な表現

I get drunk, but I'm not sure how many glasses of alcohol make me drunk.

And also I've heard that during my grandmother's era they used a leak for a natural remedy. When they caught a cold, they wrapped the leak with a towel then put it around one's neck like a scarf. I've never done it so I'm not sure if it would be effective or not.
 

1. The word 'getting' you used is not necessary, remove it.
2. The word before you used does not fit in this context because you already mentioned the word 'era'.
2. The word 'really' you used is not necessary.
You should try it if you want to know if it is effective or not. Don't you have other home remedies that you can use?

I should. !! No, I have no idea other home remedies.

自然な表現

I should. !! No, I have no idea about other home remedies.
 

1. You missed a preposition after the word idea.
  • overthinking(考えすぎ)
  • in mind(頭の中で)
  • concern(s)(不安、心配、関心事)
  • discuss(意見を交わす、議論する)
  • deadline(締め切り)
  • it is argued that 〜(〜ということが議論されている)
  • I suffer from 〜(〜で苦しむ)
  • ordinary life (日常)
  • it makes me wonder (不思議に思う)
  • manage to do 〜(なんとか〜する)

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