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外国人と相撲を見に行こう

Taking a foreigner to watch Sumo wrestling
あなたは、外国人と相撲の観戦に行きます。
相撲観戦がより楽しくなるように、事前に簡単なルールを説明してあげましょう。また、料金や席の情報などを教えてあげてもよいでしょう。
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What do you know about Sumo?
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What do you know about Sumo?

What a nice question! I know a lot about sumo. I have gone to sumo tournament more than 10 times. It is well known that sumo tournament start at morning, may be at 9:00 AM and finish about 6:00 PM to Japanese. Once I have sat right next to a foreigners couple. They came a little past 5:00 PM. Then the boy went to buy lunch boxes and cups of drink. I worried they should miss the best match of the day. Infact, my worry came true. When he came back to the seat, the final match had just finished.

自然な表現

What a nice question! I know a lot about sumo. I have gone to sumo tournament more than 10 times. It is well known that sumo tournament starts in the morning, may be at 9:00 AM and finishes at about 6:00 PM . Once I  sat right next to a foreigner couple. They came a little past 5:00 PM. Then the boy went to buy lunch boxes and cups of drink. I worried they would miss the best match of the day. Infact, my worry came true. By the time he returned to the seat, the final match had just finished.

1. As you are talking about one tournament, use the word "starts" (singular verb)
for e.g.
"The match starts on time"
"The matches start on time"
2. You should use "in" with "morning". Also use the definite article.
for e.g.
"I went for a walk in the morning"
3. Again use the singular verb as you are talking about a singular noun.
4. Use "at" to talk about a specific time.
for e.g.
"She gets up at 5 in the morning"
5. You need not use "to Japanese" in this case.
6. It is incorrect to use "have" here as this is a case of simple past tense.
7. As you are talking about one couple, use the word "foreigner"
8. I have given a better word that should be used here.
9. I have given an alternate expression though your sentence is correct.
Oh, that's too bad for them. Anyway, how long does it take for one match to finish? How is Sumo being played?

I regret that if they knew more about sumo, they could enjoy much. He looked so shocked for his blunder. Japanese traditional amusements, such as sumo and kabuki, have similar style, for example they finish in early evening. We can eat and drink watching the entertainment. Sumo is an instant match. It often takes only two to three seconds. So, you have to concentrate not to miss the moment. Though sometimes it takes more than one minute, that is a rare case. We enjoy the routine motions, which have spiritual meanings, as well as the psychological battles.

自然な表現

I regret that if they knew more about sumo, they could have enjoyed more. He looked so shocked for his blunder. Japanese traditional amusements, such as sumo and kabuki, have similar style, for example they finish early in the evening. We can eat and drink while watching the match. Sumo is an instant match. It often takes only two to three seconds. So, you have to concentrate not to miss the moment. Though sometimes it takes more than one minute, that is a rare case. We enjoy the routine motions, which have spiritual meanings, as well as the psychological battles.

1. I have given a better way of saying this. You can use "could have" to indicate the past
for e.g.
"I could have finished it if you had helped me"
2. I have given a more natural way of saying this.
3. Your sentence is correct. I have given an alternate expression.
Oh, wow! I didn't know it finishes that fast. Is there are Sumo stadium near here? How much does a ticket usually cost?

Yes, our ancestors developed a sound culture. I think it was dangerous to go out in night and lighting of the theater costed so much in the Edo Era. The sumo tournament are held six times a year. Three of them are held at Kokugikan, which means national sports stadium. It is located in Ryogoku,Tokyo. I can get there within a hour by train. The cheapest ticket is a current one for unreserved seats, which costs 2000 yen. Reserved seats cost 3500yen to 8000 yen. They sale 'masuseki' for wealthy supporters, which cost 40000yen and available to four person.

自然な表現

Yes, our ancestors developed a sound culture. I think it was dangerous to go out at night and lighting of the theater cost so much in the Edo Era. The sumo tournaments are held six times a year. Three of them are held at Kokugikan, which means national sports stadium. It is located in Ryogoku,Tokyo. I can get there within an hour by train. The cheapest ticket is the current one for unreserved seats, which costs 2000 yen. Reserved seats cost 3500yen to 8000 yen. They sell 'masuseki' for wealthy supporters, which cost 40000yen and available to four persons.

1. Use the preposition "at" with night. for e.g.
"I heard a strange sound at night"
2. The past tense of "cost" remains as it is.
3. As you have used the word "are" (used with plural nouns), use the word "tournaments" (in the plural form)
4. Even though the word "hour" starts with "h" which is a consonant, "h" is silent here. We consider the next letter which is "o" and is a vowel. You should therefore use "an" with it.
5. While talking of a specific ticket (the current one), use the definite article.
for e.g.
"Who is the current president?"
6. I have given the correct word that should be used here. You should use "sell" which is the opposite of buy. Sale means a discount.
for e.g.
"I want to sell this car"
"Is this for sale?"
7. While talking of more than one person, use the word "people" or "persons"
Oh, watching a Sumo match is pretty expensive. Can't we get cheaper tickets? I really want to witness a Sumo match.

The current tickets are good for you, but you have to go the stadium early morning and stand in a que. Because Kisenosato was newly promoted to Yokoduna for the first time in 14 years for Japanese sumo wrester, sumo tickets have become plutinum tickes. The matchs are not only thriling, exciting and powerful, but also beautiful. I really want you to watch in person. They say a picture's worth a thousand words.

自然な表現

The current tickets are good for you, but you have to go to the stadium early morning and stand in a queue. Because Kisenosato was newly promoted to Yokoduna for the first time in 14 years for Japanese sumo wrestlers, sumo tickets have become plutinum tickes. The matches are not only thriling, exciting and powerful, but also beautiful. I really want you to watch in person. They say a picture's worth a thousand words.

1. One goes "to" a particular place.
for e.g.
"They go to the circus every year"
2. I have corrected the spelling.
3. and 4. The spellings have been corrected.
  • one of the most popular sports(最も人気のあるスポーツのひとつ)
  • defeat〜(〜を負かす)
  • championship(優勝)
  • match(試合)
  • tournament (トーナメント)
  • performance has deteriorated(最近パフォーマンスが良くない)
  • Sumo has been a popular Japanese sport for centuries(お相撲は何世紀にもわたって日本で人気のスポーツである)
  • amazed by the game (その試合に驚かされる)
  • the arena is packed with people(会場は人でいっぱいだ)
  • the tickets are sold out(チッケトは売り切れだ)

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