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英語エッセイを添削してもらおう

Let's write an essay
英語のエッセイを添削してもらいましょう。
会話の添削だけではなく、エッセイの添削もしてほしい生徒様にぴったりのレッスンです。
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Please write an essay that needs to be corrected.

I tied to summarize an article, so please check and correct it.
I think it is a short summary.

Don't you feel stressed out by Zoom?
You have used Zoom a lot since the corona virus hit. Being on Zoom requires more focus than face-to-face chats although it is very convenient and such the latest technology.
There are mainly four reasons for zoom fatigue.
One of the reasons is that we cannot see non-verbal cues like facial expressions, the tone and pitch of the voice and body language. It makes conversation harder and we feel stressed before we know,,,

自然な表現

I tied to summarize an article, so please check and correct it.
I think it is a short summary.

Don't you feel stressed out by Zoom?
You have used Zoom a lot since the coronavirus hit. Being on Zoom requires more focus than face-to-face chats although it is very convenient and such the latest technology.
There are mainly four reasons for zoom fatigue.
One of the reasons is that we cannot see non-verbal cues like facial expressions, the tone and pitch of the voice, and body language. It makes conversation harder and we feel stressed before we know__.

1. A spelling correction. "coronavirus" is one word.
2. Add a comma here for proper punctuation.
3. I have removed ",,," that was not necessary here. If you wanted to indicate that there are some missing words, you could have used the ellipsis "..."
Great job. Many people have resorted to using Zoom since the pandemic started. Would you like to continue writing your essay? All corrections will be done later on.

Yeah, I will.

 before we know it.
Another reason is silence.
Silence creates a natural rhythm in a real-conversation, however it makes us awkward for some reason on Zoom.
Another one is cameras.
We feel that as if we are on stages since we usually turn on our cameras on Zoom and we always care about how we are seen on screen. It's absolutely social pressure.
The other one is environments which we use Zoom.
Places which we see friends, colleagues and family are originally separated, however they are the same now since we see all of them on Zoom...

自然な表現

Yeah, I will.

Before we know it.
Another reason is silence.
Silence creates a natural rhythm in a real-conversation, however it makes us awkward for some reason on Zoom.
Another one is the cameras.
We feel that as if we are on stages since we usually turn on our cameras on Zoom and we always care about how we are seen on screen. It's absolutely social pressure.
The other one is the environments in which we use Zoom.
Places which we see friends, colleagues, and family are originally separated, however, they are the same now since we see all of them on Zoom...

1. Capitalize on the word beginning a sentence.
2 & 3. Use "the" when referring to something that is specific.
4. Add the preposition "in" to indicate location/place.
5. Add a serial comma here for proper punctuation.
6. Add a comma here to indicate a soft pause.
Well done. Do you think Zoom is way different from all the other video call applications like skype?

You might not notice the situation, but it definitely makes you uncomfortable.
the corona virus's situation in most countries remains worse and we know we are studying together thanks to Zoom, so we have to deal with zoom fatigue and know how to overcome it.
According to two experts, limiting how many hours we stay on zoon is paramount, besides reducing time to turn on cameras is also important since it helps us be efficient and refreshed.
In works, it is good to consider if zoom is really the best way.

Do you mind if I replay next dialogue?

自然な表現

You might not notice the situation, but it definitely makes you uncomfortable.
the coronavirus's situation in most countries remains worse and we know we are studying together thanks to Zoom, so we have to deal with Zoom fatigue and know how to overcome it.
According to two experts, limiting how many hours we stay on Zoom is paramount, besides reducing the time to turn on cameras is also important since it helps us be efficient and refreshing.
In works, it is good to consider if zoom is really the best way.

Do you mind if I replay the next dialogue?

1 & 3. Spelling corrections.
2. Capitalize on this name of a video call application.
4 & 6. "the" is used when referring to something unique or specific.
5. "refreshing," use the adjectival form here for a natural flow.
Well done. What do you think a person can do if they miss a Zoom lesson or meeting? Please continue.

I think all the other video call applications are almost the same as Zoom, but I have heard the number of people who can join at the same time is very big on zoom.
It's definitely a good point, however I think classes on zoom at my university have too many people.

To be honest, I had skipped the classes at my university a few times, but I thought it was easier to make up for the class than the face-to-face classes.
It's because I can get the handouts and even check my homework o the homepage.

自然な表現

I think all the other video call applications are almost the same as Zoom, but I have heard the number of people who can join at the same time is very big on Zoom.
It's definitely a good point, however, I think classes on zoom at my university have too many people.

To be honest, I had skipped the classes at my university a few times, but I thought it was easier to make up for the class than the face-to-face classes.
It's because I can get the handouts and even check my homework on the homepage.

1. As I have said before, capitalize on this name of a video call application.
2. Add a comma here to indicate a soft pause.
3. Spelling correctiom of "on."
  • preposition (前置詞)
  • grammar(文法)
  • proofreading(校正、訂正)
  • touch up (修正)
  • expression (表現)
  • Please tell me what I should pay close attention to when I write an essay (エッセイを書くとき、私は何に気を付けて書けばいいでしょうか)
  • What will be more natural expression for the sentence number one?(最初の文をより自然な表現で書くとどのようになりますか?)
  • Would you tell me what thesaurus I should use for 〜(どのような言い回し表現を〜に使えばいいですか?)
  • I would like you to especially check that 〜(〜を特にチェックしてもらいたい)
  • What would be the best expression to use for this occasion?(この場合はどの表現を使うのがベストですか?)

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