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Yes, but thank you for coming all the way from far away today. I'd like to now introduce our factory. We have two sections in our factory, and it will take you about an hour to see it. Before we show you our factory, there are few things you need to know. The factory can be so dangerous in some areas that you should wear a helmet at all times. As a precaution, taking pictures inside the factory is prohibited. If you have no questions, we are going to our factory in 5 minutes.
Yes, and thank you for coming all the way from far away today. I'd now like to introduce our factory. We have two sections in our factory, and it will take you about an hour to see them. Before we show you our factory, there are a few things you need to know. The factory can be so dangerous in some areas that you should wear a helmet at all times. As a precaution, taking pictures inside the factory is prohibited. If you have no questions, we will go to our factory in 5 minutes.
You are right. It looks like everything is ready, so let us head to the factory. First, we'll show you our factory where aluminum parts are manufactured, and then you will see the factory for the finishing process. Here, we've arrived at the first factory. You can see the aluminum raw material being melted in the blast furnace. The temperature of aluminum is 660 degree Celsius, but the temperature of the furnace is set at 1,000 degree Celsius. And then, the melted aluminum is poured into formwork over there. Phew, it's a little hot in the factory.
You are right. It looks like everything is ready, so let us head to the factory. First, we'll show you where aluminum parts are manufactured, and then you will see the factory for the finishing processes. Here, we've arrived at the first factory. You can see raw aluminum being melted in the blast furnace. The temperature of melting aluminum is 660 degrees Celsius, but the temperature of the furnace is set at 1,000 degrees Celsius. Then, the melted aluminum is poured into formwork over there. Phew, it's a little hot in the factory.
2 - Use the plural form when talking about something in general.
3 - This is a more natural way to convey the desired meaning.
4 - Add the adjective 'melting' to be even more specific and clear.
5, 6 - Use the noun in the plural form after numbers in the plural.
7 - Avoid starting sentences with the conjunction 'and.' Instead, it is best to remove it from the sentence altogether.
The formwork that you are looking at is about 10 meters long, which is very long, but it does not mean that this will become an end product. When these aluminum parts are cooled, these are carried to the second factory by conveyor belt automatically. There are only 5 employees in this factory area because we have streamlined the manufacturing process completely. Now, let's move on to the second factory. These products are processed into the shapes that we see every day there. Please imagine what king of product you will finally get!
The formwork that you are looking at is about 10 meters long, which is very long, but it does not mean that this will become the end product. When these aluminum parts are cooled, they are automatically carried to the second factory by a conveyor belt. There are only 5 employees in this factory area because we have streamlined the manufacturing process completely. Now, let's move on to the second factory. These products are processed into the shapes that we see every day there. Please imagine what kind of product you will finally get!
2 - Instead of 'these,' use the pronoun 'they' to make the phrase grammatically correct.
3 - Use the adverb 'automatically' at this point of the sentence to sound more natural.
4 - Use an indefinite article before something that is not specific.
5 - Spelling mistake.
Well, our products are mass-produced and our business is mainly business-to-business, and our biggest customers are construction companies. In our second factory, these long aluminum parts are cut into two lengths and the final shape is a rectangular frame made up of 4 parts. After being cut by the machine over there, the products are transported to that area. Look at that huge pool-like tank. We plate our products there, and once the plating is dry, the next is assembly. This is the final step in the process, so I hope you've figure out what our product is.
Well, our products are mass-produced and our business is mainly business-to-business, and our biggest customers are construction companies. In our second factory, these long aluminum parts are cut into two lengths and the final shape is a rectangular frame made up of 4 parts. After being cut by the machine over there, the products are transported to that area. Look at that huge pool-like tank. We plate our products there, and once the plating is dry, we move on to assembly. This is the final step in the process, so I hope you've figured out what our product is.
Approximately, it takes 10 minutes to finish an aluminum sash in our factory. Our products have a 40% share of the Japanese market. Therefore, we pay full attention to our machines and contingency plans in order to fulfill our supply responsibilities.
It takes approximately 10 minutes to finish an aluminum sash in our factory. Our products have a 40% share in the Japanese market. Therefore, we pay full attention to our machines and contingency plans in order to fulfill our supply responsibilities.
関連単語
- cap（帽子）
- precaution（注意事項）
- touch（触れる）
- machine（機械）
- dangerous（危険な）
関連フレーズ
- In the factory, please do not touch the machines.（工場内で機械に触らないでください。）
- First of all, I will explain the precautions.（まず初めに、注意事項を説明させていただきます。）
- Before entering the factory, please make sure to put on a cap.（工場に入る前に必ず帽子をかぶってください。）
- The machines are really dangerous.（機械は本当に危険です。）
- Please do not run in the factory.（工場内で走らないでください。）
こんな方にオススメ
2 - This is the correct word order.
3 - Use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'two sections' which is in the plural.
4 - 'Few' means not enough, and 'a few' means some, but not many.
5 - Instead of the future be going to which is used for plans, it sounds more natural to use the future 'will' here as this is more of an on-the-spot decision.