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On behalf of our president, I would like to answer your inquiry. As you know, our business has been expanding steadily since our foundation. The reason for it is, we think, that our products and services would contribute to the people who want to improve their lifestyles. In other words, our products are essential for those people nowadays. However, some competitors started to enter our business area and deprive our customers of high-quality service with their inferior products. In order to counter this movement, we decided to introduce new subscription services to our customers.
On behalf of our president, I would like to answer your inquiry. As you know, our business has been expanding steadily since our foundation. We think it is because our products and services would benefit the people who want to improve their lifestyles. In other words, our products are essential for people nowadays. However, some companies started to enter our business and deprive our customers of high-quality services with their inferior products. In order to counter this movement, we decided to introduce new subscription services to our customers.
In introducing a new service, we installed a new system to operate it separately. The development cost of the new system and that depreciation cost caused the decrease in the final profits. We would confirm that our subscription service has been doing well so far, but the efficacy for sales figures will be late. One of the merits of the subscription services is that we could predict our sales perspective in the future. Furthermore, we will be able to reduce our operating costs, such as advertising costs. It means that we are optimistic about our company's future performance.
In introducing a new service, we installed a new system to operate it separately. The development cost of the new system and the depreciation cost caused a decrease in the final profits. We would confirm that our subscription service has been doing well so far, but the efficacy of our sales figures will be late. One of the merits of subscription services is that we could predict our prospective sales in the future. Furthermore, we will be able to reduce our operating costs, such as advertising costs. As a result, we are optimistic about our company's future performance.
2. Use "a" when mentioning something for the first time. You can use "the" for subsequent mentions of the same thing.
3. "For" is used to indicate purpose. It is misused here. "Of" is the right preposition to use in this case.
4. "Sales figures" need a determiner. Whose are these?
5. You mentioned a new "service," not "services". Thus, it is not clear what subscription services you are referring to here. I think you are referring to them in general. Don't use "the" when generalizing.
6. I think you mean "prospective sales" instead of "sales perspective". These are very different terms. The first one fits this context. The second one doesn't.
7. Pronouns need reference words. The reference for "it" is not clear here. Use a transitional phrase here instead.
Our annual subscription fee is half the price of the usual one-year purchase. It is competitively priced and will help us to defend our customer outflow. We are expecting a 20% increase in the sales of our next annual sales by using this strategy.
Our annual subscription fee is half the price of the usual one-year purchase. It is competitively priced and will help us to fight against customer outflow. We are expecting a 20% increase in the sales of our next annual sales by using this strategy.
関連単語
- unprofitable operation（経営不振）
- breakthrough （打開策）
- turning point（転換点）
- necessary expenses（必要経費）
- capital investment（設備投資）
関連フレーズ
- The main reason for this performance is the intensification of competition in this market area. The main cause of this slump in performance is due to increased competition within the market.（経営不振の主な原因は、市場の競争の激化です。）
- We finally found the cause of this poor performance.（この経営不振の原因がようやくわかりました。）
- Our company is going to lay off 500 employees.（500人を解雇する予定です。 ）
- We are planning to give “great employees” awards in order to motivate the employees. We are planning to introduce an employee incentive program based on performance in order to boost morale.（社員の士気を高めるため、業績に応じた従業員インセンティブ制度を導入する予定です。）
- Our company was lagging behind the competition.（私たちの会社は競合に後れを取った。）
こんな方にオススメ
2. "Contribute" doesn't fit this context. You can use either "benefit" or "help" in this case.
3. The reference for "those people" is not too clear. It is better to remove "those" to generalize the statement instead.
4. "Company" is the right word to use here because they only started to enter the same business. In essence, they were not yet your competitors at that point in time. If you want to use "competitor," you can remove the time factor and say it this way: "Our competitors deprive our customers..."
5. The technical meaning of "business area" doesn't fit this context. It refers to areas of operation within an organization. What you are referring to here is "line of business" or simply "business".
6. Use plurals when generalizing.