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経営企画担当から今期の目標をヒアリングしよう

Quarterly Goals.
あなたは経営企画担当に今期の目標について説明を受けています。
予算の策定準備やコンサルティングに際したヒアリングなどで、事業戦略や目標などを詳しく聞く場面があるでしょう。実現性を見極めるため、利用できるリソースや計画の根拠についても詳しく聞きましょう。
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Here is our plan for this term.
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Here is our plan for this term.

I see, your plan estimates our profit will grow 120%.
Well, let me ask some questions about this plan. Firstly, do you have any new strategy to achieve the goal? If so, please explain it.
Secondly, let me check conventional percent complete.

自然な表現

I see, your plan estimates our profit will grow by 120%.
Well, let me ask some questions about this plan. Firstly, do you have any new strategy to achieve the goal? If so, please explain it.
Secondly, let me check conventional percent complete.

1. When pairing the verb "to grow" with a value, we need to use the preposition "by".
2. It is unclear what you meant to say here. You can discuss with your Skype teacher what you meant to say.
Yes, we have been working on some new strategies to achieve this plan and we have also been doing a lot of benchmarking, so it is a combination of several different strategies.

Wow, that is interesting. I hope they will succeed. According to those benchmarking, what do you think a the odds of attainment? Are there any concerns about those strategies or achieving the goal?

自然な表現

Wow, that is interesting. I hope they will succeed. According to the benchmarking, what do you think are the odds of attainment? Are there any concerns about those strategies or achieving the goal?

1. "Benchmarking" is an uncountable noun so we can't use determiners for plural nouns to refer to it.
2. Spellcheck.
Well, to be honest, my primary goal is to take over as many customers from the competition as we can, I think that we have better conditions and it shouldn't be a problem.

I see. Could you tell me a little about the facts that were revealed by the benchmarking, in order to confirm the basis of this plan?

自然な表現

_ Could you tell me a little about the facts that were revealed by the benchmarking, in order to confirm the basis of this plan?

1. Starting your "turn to speak" so many times with "I see" would be considered odd in English. In Europe and North America, acknowledging what the other person is saying is done with facial expressions or simple nods.
Yes, we have found out that all our competitors have 10 to 15% more expensive products than ours, and ours are produced with much higher quality.

That is a great observation, but it might be too optimistic because other products should have some strong points. You should have to recognize what is a our weak point.

自然な表現

That is a great observation, but it might be too optimistic because other products should have some strong points. You should have to recognize what is _ our weak point.

1. Possessive pronouns like "our" serve as determiners so additional determiners are redundant.
I think that our weak point is our marketing. Not many consumers know that our product is cheaper and has a higher quality.

All right, so now we need to increase the degree of recognition.

自然な表現

All right, _ now we need to increase the degree of recognition.

1. Conjunctions are used to contextually connect simple sentences into compound ones. Since this is all one simple sentence, we don't need conjunctions.

Excellent work on the script! Enjoy your Skype lesson :)
  • data(データ)
  • possibility(可能性)
  • achieve(達成する)
  • strategy(戦略)
  • basis(根拠)
  • Please let me check conventional percent complete.(今までの達成率を確認させてください。)
  • Are there any concerns about archiving the goal?(目標を達成する上での懸念点はありますか?)
  • What are the odds of nonattainment?(未達成する確率はどれくらい?)
  • Would you check the resource to archive the goal?(目標を達成するためのリソースを確認してくれますか?)
  • What is the basis (source) of these facts and data?(これらの数字やデータの根拠は何ですか?)

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