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My favorite historic person is Elizabeth Blackwell, the first women to be a doctor in the world. She is a British woman who was born in the 1820's. She was born in a family that has 9 children, which made Elizabeth difficult to do what she wanted to. However, when she became older, she decided to become a doctor and worked very hard, going through many extreme situations. In 1859, she was, finally, she became the first woman registered to be a doctor. Therefore, Elizabeth Blackwell is my favorite historical person.
My favorite historical person is Elizabeth Blackwell, the first woman to be a doctor in the world. She was a British woman who was born in the 1820s. She was born into a family that had nine children, which made it difficult for Elizabeth to do what she wanted to do. However, when she became older, she decided to become a doctor and worked very hard, going through many extreme situations. In 1849, she finally became the first woman registered as a doctor. Therefore, Elizabeth Blackwell is my favorite historical person.
I believe that she had to overcome the voices of disagreement for her, a woman, to be a doctor. Since she was the first woman to be a doctor, I think she had a lot of pressure by her friends and family; they might have said something that hurt Elizabeth's feelings to be a doctor. Also, she had a lot of siblings, and her family was also facing some challenges, she would have only a little bit of money for her from her family. Sadly, she would have to learn and earn money by herself.
I believe that she had to overcome opposition to her becoming a doctor because she was a woman. Since she was the first woman to be a doctor, I think she had a lot of pressure from her friends and family; they might have said things that hurt Elizabeth's feelings about her desire to become a doctor. Also, since she had a lot of siblings, and her family was also facing financial challenges, she would have had only a little bit of money from her family. Sadly, she would have had to learn and earn money by herself.
2. Use "from" because the correct preposition with "pressure" is "from."
3. Use "things" because "they" is plural.
4. Rephrase it as "about her desire to become." Feelings are typically "about something." "Her desire to become a doctor" clarifies what the feelings were connected to.
5. Add "since" to make it clear that the following statement is a reason or cause.
6. Use "financial" to connect the family’s situation more clearly to the limited money Elizabeth had access to.
7, 9. Add "had" because the correct tense here is "would have had," since the situation is inferred about the past.
8. Remove "for her" because it is redundant.
There is a lot of achievements of hers I look up to. First, not only her, but her whole family was in a religion called Quaker, so they hated gender discrimination and slavery. Second, she still didn't give up being a doctor when she lost her right eye because of her own disease. Third, she contributed to the study of a doctor for women and the rights for women to become a doctor. All of these are things I respect about her.
There are a lot of her achievements that I look up to. First, not only she, but her whole family was in a religion called Quaker, so they hated gender discrimination and slavery. Second, she still didn't give up being a doctor when she lost her right eye because of an infection. Third, she contributed to the medical education for women and advocated for the rights of women to become doctors. All of these are things I respect about her.
2. Rephrase it as "her achievements that." "Her achievements that I look up to" flows better and avoids redundancy.
3. Use "she" because after "not only," the subject form "she" is grammatically correct.
4. Use "an infection" because historically, she lost her sight due to an eye infection contracted from a patient.
5. Rephrase it as "medical education for women." It accurately describes her efforts to train women in medicine.
6. Use "advocated for" because we say "advocate for the rights of…"
7. Use "of" because the correct phrase is "the rights of women,"
8. Use "doctors" since we’re speaking generally.
I think she have impacted a lot of, not only women, but also men today. I think that she was the one who expressed her strong feelings towards gender equality and slavery. She has also supported women who wanted to be a doctor but was discriminated by their gender. She allowed women to learn studies for medicine. All her surprising and aspiring legacy comes from her resilience and dedication.
I think she has impacted a lot of, not only women, but also men today. I think that she was one of those who expressed strong feelings against gender inequality and slavery. She also supported women who wanted to become doctors but were discriminated against because of their gender. She enabled women to study medicine. All her surprising and inspiring legacy came from her resilience and dedication.
2. Use "one of those" because this acknowledges that she was one among many who fought for those causes.
3. Remove "her" because it’s objective and general to say just "strong feelings."
4. Use "against" when referring to opposition.
5. Use "inequality" because she opposed gender inequality.
6. Remove "has," since this is in a historical context, and the simple past tense is sufficient.
7. Use "become doctors" because it is the standard form when referring to plural women aiming to enter the profession.
8. Use "were" because the subject ("women") is plural.
9. Use "against because of" because the correct expression is "discriminated against because of their gender," which specifies the reason for the discrimination.
10. Use "enabled" because it is more accurate; it emphasizes empowering and creating opportunities.
11. Use "study" because "study medicine" is the correct and natural phrase.
12. Use "inspiring" because it means something that motivates others.
13. Use "came" since she lived in the 1800s.
I think it's Elon Musk. It's said that he is the wealthiest person in the world today. He is a businessman who is the leader of Tesla, X (twitter), etc. I believe he is one of the cleverest people who is helping to our daily lives in the 21st century.
I think it's Elon Musk. It's said that he is the wealthiest person in the world today. He is a businessman who is the leader of Tesla, X (Twitter), etc. I believe he is one of the cleverest people who are helping our daily lives in the 21st century.
関連単語
- overseas（海外，海外で）
- influential（影響力のある）
- era（時代・年代）
- intriguing（興味深い）
- politics（政治、政治の）
関連フレーズ
- If I could travel through time, I would like to go to the future.（もしタイムトラベルできたら、未来に行きたい。）
- There are many unique aspects to Japanese history.（日本の歴史には独特な部分がたくさんあります。）
- Despite the fact that I have had very little sleep, I will still able to finish the project on time.（ほとんど寝ていないにもかかわらず、時間通りにプロジェクトを終えることができます。）
- Is it possible to be motivated by something other than money?（お金以外のものでモチベーションを上げることは可能ですか？）
- My dissertation was about~（卒業プロジェクトの最終論文は〜について書きました。）
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2. Fix the spelling error.
3. Use "was" because you're writing about someone who lived in the past.
4. Use "1820s" because no apostrophe is needed when writing decades.
5. Use "into" because the correct preposition is "into" when describing entry or placement within a group.
6. Use "had" because the past tense is needed to match the rest of the sentence and time period.
7. Spell out numbers from one to nine in text, and use numerals for numbers 10 and above. EXAMPLES: She has three dogs and two cats. There were 15 people at the meeting.
8. Rephrase it as "made it difficult for Elizabeth." The correct structure is "made it difficult for [someone] to [verb]."
9. Add "do" because it is needed to complete the infinitive construction.
10. Use "1849." This is a historical fact correction: Elizabeth Blackwell graduated from Geneva Medical College in 1849, not 1859.
11. Fix the word order issue.
12. Use "as a" because the correct preposition "as" is used when describing a role, title, or identity.