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I struggle with ants. My house is so old, that many ants appear inside my house. They usually emerge at the kitchen and sink. I kill them with a tissue soaked with alcohol, but ants may too hard to smash easily. My inner surface of fingers got to hurt because of touching alcohol or smashing many times. My mother said that do not place a bait which gathered ants in the house, but I did it finally. Massive ants which have wings appear most in October last year, so I worry about this October as well.
I struggle with ants. My house is so old that many ants appear inside it. They usually emerge in the kitchen and sink. I kill them with a tissue soaked in alcohol, but ants are too hard to smash easily. My fingertips started to hurt because of touching alcohol and smashing them many times. My mother said not to place bait that attracts ants in the house, but I did it anyway. Massive ants with wings appeared in October last year, so I worry about this October as well.
My house is not a mat foundation, so probably ants come from under the floor, but I have not found a hole. Do you think that I should cover the hole first? I tend to try to kill ants as soon as I find them, but I need to persevere it, let them walk, observe ant's movements carefully, and find the course and source. My house is built of reinforced concrete, so ants shouldn't be white ants, but I'm not sure. I believe that ants don't break my house such as ants written in one Hundred Years of Solitude.
My house does not have a mat foundation, so probably ants come from under the floor, but I have not found a hole. Do you think that I should cover the hole first? I tend to try to kill ants as soon as I find them, but I need to persevere , let them walk, observe their movements carefully, and find the route they are taking and source. My house is built of reinforced concrete, so the ants should not be termites, but I am not sure. I believe that the ants will not damage my house like the ants described in "One Hundred Years of Solitude."
2. The verb "persevere" is intransitive and so does not take a direct object. The object pronoun "it" has therefore been removed.
3. In your original wording, "ant's" should have been "the ants'". The definite article "the" was required as you were referring specifically to the ants previously mentioned; and you were referring to the movelemtns of more than one ant and so should have used the plural possessive "ants'". However, it has been changed to the possessive adjective "their" to avoid unnecessary repetition. This enhances flow.
4. The noun "course" has been changed to "route they are taking" for greater clarity.
5. As you are referring specifically to the ants previously mentioned, you need the definite article "the" here.
6. The contraction "shouldn't" has been expanded to "should not" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
7. The phrase "white ants" is too informal here and so has been changed to "termites" for a more formal and appropriate term.
8. The contraction "I'm" has been expanded to "I am" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
9. As at 5 above.
10. The present simple "don't" has been changed to the future simple "will not" as you are anticipating a future event. Also, you should avoid contractions in formal writing.
11. The verb "break" has been changed to "damage" for a more natural expression of this idea.
12. The words "such as" have been changed to "like", which is more appropriate when making a comparison.
13. As at 5 above.
14. In your original wording, "written" should have been "written about". However, it has been changed to "described" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
15. Book titles should be enclosed in quotation marks (or italicised) with the initial letter of each major word capitalised.
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I see ants frequently in October. Ants are lined up near the ceiling in the both kitchen and sink.
Well, I used to see ants in the built-in cupboard before, where ants swarming to a bag of cocoa and so on, since then I have gotten to put products which ants are likely to be fond of into resealable bags. Then, I found a crack at the edge of wall and cover it with a binding.
By the way, ants like mouthwash, so I am bothered where to put it on.
I see ants frequently in October. They are lined up near the ceiling in both the kitchen and sink area.
Well, I used to see ants in the built-in cupboard before, where they swarmed around a bag of cocoa and so on. Since then, I have started to put products that ants are likely to be attracted to into resealable bags. Then, I found a crack at the edge of the wall and covered it with tape.
By the way, ants like mouthwash, so I am unsure where to store it .
2. The definite article "the" is redundant before "both" and so has been removed.
3. As you are referring to a specific kitchen, you need the definite article "the" here.
4. As the ceiling is not in the sink, the noun "area" has been added after "sink" for greater clarity.
5. A paragraph break has been inserted to enhance readability.
6. The second instance of "ants" in this sentence has been changed to the pronoun "they" to avoid unnecessary repetition. This enhances flow.
7. The present participle "swarming" has been changed to the past simple "swarmed" as you are describing an action completed in the past.
8. The preposition "around" is more appropriate than "to" here.
9. The comma has been changed to bring this sentence to a natural end and remedy the comma splice in your original wording.
10. As "Since" is now the first word of the sentence, its initial letter should be capitalised.
11. A comma has been inserted to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause.
12. The verb "gotten" has been changed to "started" for greater precision and clarity and a more formal and appropriate tone.
13. The relative pronoun "which" has been changed to "that" to start the restrictive relative clause correctly.
14. The words "be fond of" imply affection, which is inappropriate in the context of ants. They have therefore been changed to "attracted to" for a more natural expression of this idea.
15. As you are referring to a specific wall, you need the definite article "the" here.
16. The present simple "cover" has been changed to the past simple "covered" for consistency of tense usage.
17. The words "a binding" have been changed to "tape" for a more natural expression.
18. As at 5 above.
19. The adjective "bothered" has been change to "unsure" for greater precision and clarity.
20. The verb "put" has been changed to "store" for greater precision and clarity.
21. The preposition "on" is redundant here and so has been removed.
Ants are gathered round the used oil as well. There is a project which an aircraft flies with used oil, and I have stored it in a set bottle, then ants were swarmed with it. There is a spot to pour used oil in a supermarket, my bottle became oily when I poured it. It was insufficient to have covered the bottle with a plastic bag, so ants discovered it. Ants aren't gathered round the bottle now.
Certainly, bugs don't move actively when the temperature falls, for example. I don't remember how was the weather, I will check it.
Ants gather round used oil as well. There is a project in which an aircraft flies fueled by used oil, and I had stored it in a designated bottle, and then ants swarmed around it. There is a spot to drop off used oil at a local supermarket, and my bottle became oily when I poured it out there. It was not sufficient to have covered the bottle with a plastic bag, so ants discovered it. Ants are not gathering round the bottle at the moment.
Certainly, bugs do not move actively when the temperature falls, for example. I do not remember what the weather was like. I will check it.
2. As you are referring to used oil generally, the definite article "the" is not required here.
3. As the aircraft operates within the project, the preposition "in" is required before the relative pronoun "which".
4. The preposition "with" has been changed to "fueled by" for greater precision and clarity.
5. The present perfect "have stored" has been changed to the past perfect "had stored" as you are describing the earlier of two actions in the past.
6. The word "set" has been changed to "designated" for a more natural expression of this idea and a more formal and appropriate tone.
7. The conjunction "and" has been added to join the independent clauses either side and remedy the comma splice in your original wording.
8. In this context, "swarmed" is an intransitive verb and so cannot be expressed in the passive voice. The words "were swarmed" have therefore been changed to the active "swarmed".
9. The correct expression here is "swarmed around".
10. The verb "pour" has been changed to the phrasal verb "drop off", which is the standard idiomatic expression used to describe the act of leaving something at a collection point.
11. The preposition "in" has been corrected to "at" before "local supermarket".
12. The adjective "local" has been added before "supermarket" for greater precision and clarity.
13. As at 7 above.
14. The word "out" has been added after "poured it" for greater precision and clarity.
15. The adverb "there" has been added to refer pack to the spot referred to in the previous clause. This enhances flow.
16. The word "insufficient" has been changed to "not sufficient" for a more natural expression.
17. The contraction "aren't" has been expanded to "are not" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
18. "Gathered" has been changed to "gathering" to form the present continuous tense, which is appropriate to describe an ongoing situation.
19. The word "now" has been changed to "at the moment" for a more natural and idiomatic expression of this idea.
20. A paragraph break has been inserted to enhance readability.
21. The contraction "don't" has been expanded to "do not" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
22. As at 21 above.
23. The words "how was the weather" have been changed to "what the weather was like" for a more natural and idiomatic expresison of this idea. Please note the correct ordering of subject and verb in an indirect question.
24. The comma has been changed to a full stop to bring this sentence to a natural end and remedy the comma splice in your original wording.
I read over my last notebook written last year, on November 6th, I wrote that it was a sunny feeling hot day, and many winged ants were in my house. It was not October, but probably I got to be conscious of ants in October, and they emerged again in November, so I must have written impulsively. Birds are said that they cannot fly with wet wings, so neither can winged ants in my opinion.
I am going to continue to investigate ants.
I read through my notebook written last year, and on November 6th, I wrote that it was a sunny , hot day, and many winged ants were in my house. It was not October, but probably I became conscious of ants in October, and they emerged again in November, so I must have written on impulse. Birds are said not to be able to fly with wet wings, so neither can winged ants, in my opinion. I am going to continue to investigate ants.
2. The first of two instances of "last" in this sentence has been removed to avoid unnecessary repetition. This enhances flow.
3. The conjunction "and" has been added to join the independent clauses before and after it.
4. The word "feeling" is redundant here and so has been removed.
5. A comma has been inserted to separate the coordinate adjectives either side.
6. The words "got to be" have been changed to "became" for a more formal and appropriate tone.
7. The adverb "impulsively" has been changed to "on impulse" for a more natural and idiomatic expression of this idea.
8. The words "that they cannot" have been changed to "not to be able to" for grammatical correctness after "Birds are said".
9. When the phrase "in my opinion" occurs at the end of a sentence, it should be preceded by a comma to separate it from the main clause.
10. A line break is not required here.
関連単語
- a farewell party（送別会）
- a welcome party（歓迎会）
- a former colleague（かつての同僚）
- presentation（発表、プレゼンテーション）
- club activities（部活）
- excursion（小旅行、遠足）
- ordinarily（いつものように）
関連フレーズ
- We had a farewell party.（送別会をした。）
- I went to the bar and had three beers.（パーに行ってビールを3杯飲んできたところよ。）
- I went for a drink with my former colleague.（かつての同僚と飲んできたんだよ。）
- I went to the gym and swam in the pool.（ジムで泳いで来たんですよ。）
- I felt better after going to the bar.（飲み屋に行ったら気分が晴れました。）
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2. The second instance of "my house" in this sentence has been changed to the pronoun "it" to avoid unnecessary repetition.
3. The preposition "at" has been changed to "in" before "the kitchen".
4. The correct expression here is "soaked in".
5. The modal verb "may" has been changed to the present simple "are" as you are stating a general truth.
6. The words "inner surface of fingers" have been changed to "fingertips" for a more concise and idiomatic expression of this idea.
7. The words "got to hurt" are a little awkward and unclear here and so have been changed to "started to hurt" to convey your intended meaning more clearly and naturally.
8. Your fingertips started to hurt as a result of both activities, not just one or the other of them. The conjunction "or" has therefore been changed to "and".
9. The pronoun "them" has been added to provide the missing object after the transitive verb "smashing".
10. The words "that do" are redundant here and so have been removed without loss of meaning.
11. The bare infinitive "place" has been changed to the full infinitive "to place" for grammatical correctness after "My mother said not".
12. In this context, "bait" is treated as an uncountable noun. As the indefinite article can only be used with singular countable nouns, "a" has been removed for grammatical correctness.
13. The relative pronoun "which" has been changed to "that" to start the restrictive relative clause correctly.
14. The past simple "gathered" has been changed to the present simple "attracts" to use a more appropriate verb and because you are describing a habitual action.
15. The adverb "finally" implies a long wait; whereas "anyway" convey the idea of doing something regardless of advice to the contrary and so is more appropriate here.
16. The words "which have" have been changed to the preposition "with" for a more concise and natural expression.
17. The present simple "appear" has been changed to the past simple "appeared" as you are referring to an action completed in the past (last year).
18. The word "most" is unnecessary here and impedes flow. It has therefore been removed.
19. Alternative expression: although "I worry about this October as well" is fine here, you could instead say, "I am worried that that might happen again this October, too".