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I reckon that the position for an assistant curator of Asian ceramics at Durham University,Oriental Museum is my dream job. I am working as a curator of Archaeology at Fukui Prefectural Ichijodani Asakura Family Site Museum, which is a hitorical museum about Ichijodani, the extensive medieval castle town ruin in Japan. I have experienced curating a collection including Asian ceramics and educational outreach activities there. Additionally, I have engaged in cataloging and recording ceramics from diverse periods at Kyoto City Cultural Properties Preservation Section. On account of my expriences and interests, I applied to this position.
I reckon that the position for an assistant curator of Asian ceramics at Durham University, Oriental Museum is my dream job. I am working as a curator of Archaeology at Fukui Prefectural Ichijodani Asakura Family Site Museum, which is a historical museum about Ichijodani, the extensive medieval castle town ruins in Japan. I have experience curating a collection including Asian ceramics and educational outreach activities there. Additionally, I have engaged in cataloging and recording ceramics from diverse periods at Kyoto City Cultural Properties Preservation Section. On account of my experiences and interests, I applied to this position.
I adore curating artefacts and researching thorough them. The Oriental Museum has an extensive collection from diverse regions which attracted me the most. I have been interested in cross-curtural relationships in the past. Therefore, I studied Viking Age archaeology in Iceland and underwater archaeology in Spain, Italy and Japan when I was a student. I feel the position perfectly suits my interests and backgrounds. Therefore, I regard it as my dream job. Current work at the museum only focuses on the medieval ruin, so the range of materials and research are limited. Thus I want to leave my current job.
I adore curating artefacts and researching through them. The Oriental Museum has an extensive collection from diverse regions, which attracts me the most. I have been interested in cross-cultural relationships in the past. Therefore, I studied Viking Age archaeology in Iceland and underwater archaeology in Spain, Italy and Japan when I was a student. I feel the position perfectly suits my interests and background. However, I regard it as my dream job. My current work at the museum only focuses on the medieval ruin, so the range of materials and research is limited. Thus, I want to leave my current job.
2. Add a comma (,) after regions, because you are using a non-restrictive relative clause that is which attracts me the most.
3. Use attracts instead of attracted, because you are talking about a situation that is true in the present.
4. Need to correct the spelling of cultural.
5. Use the singular form of background, because you are talking about your own education and experience. Background is a noun that can be either countable or uncountable, depending on the meaning and context. When you use it as a countable noun, it means the circumstances or situation of a person or thing. When you use it as an uncountable noun, it means the education or experience that someone has. You need to use the singular form of an uncountable noun, because it does not have a plural form.
6. Use However instead of Therefore, because you are showing a contrast or a change of direction in your argument. However is an adverb that is used to introduce a statement that is different from or surprising in relation to the previous one. Therefore is an adverb that is used to introduce a logical conclusion or a result of something. Using However is more suitable and coherent than using Therefore.
7. Mdd My before current work, because you are talking about your own job. My is a possessive adjective that is used to show that something belongs to or is related to you. Without My, it sounds like you are talking about someone else's or the museum's current work.
8. Use is instead of are, because you are talking about a singular subject that is the range of materials and research.
9. Add a comma (,) after Thus, because you are starting a new clause that summarizes or explains the previous one.
I think a skill for observation of objects is the most important as a museum curator of Asian ceramics. Curation requires handling collections with extream carefulness, not only preservsation of materials but also how to display them to audiences. In order to fulfill the requirements, a person in charge of curation must comprehend characteristics of objects. That's why I beleive an observation skill is the most essential aspect for the job.
I think a skill for observation of objects is the most important for a museum curator of Asian ceramics. Curation requires handling collections with extreme carefulness, not only preservation of materials but also how to display them to audiences. In order to fulfill the requirements, a person in charge of curation must comprehend the characteristics of objects. That's why I believe an observation skill is the most essential aspect for the job.
2, 3, and 5. Need to correct the spelling.
4. Add the before characteristics, because you are talking about specific features or qualities of something.
I confronted some challenges in my career. The most significant challenge for me was that notwithstanding a few months after I started to work at the museum, I was assigned to the person responsible for a special exhibition this year. It was too short time to prepare the exhibition, though I work really hard to accomplish it. I learned diverse aspects of a museum exhibition such as how to translate historical narratives into a fascinating display to vistors and to coorperate with various workers like designers, carpenters and researchers. Finally, I could finish the exhibition successfuly.
I faced some challenges in my career. The most significant challenge for me was that notwithstanding a few months after I started to work at the museum, I was assigned to the person responsible for a special exhibition this year. It was too short a time to prepare the exhibition, though I worked really hard to accomplish it. I learned diverse aspects of a museum exhibition such as how to translate historical narratives into a fascinating display for visitors and to cooperate with various workers like designers, carpenters, and researchers. Finally, I could finish the exhibition successfully.
2. The reason why we need to use "a" in the sentence is because "a" is an indefinite article that modifies the noun "time". In this sentence, "too short" is an adverb phrase that modifies the adjective "a time".
3. Use the past tense of worked instead of the present tense of work, because you are talking about an action that happened in the past.
4. Use for instead of to, because you are talking about the purpose or benefit of something. For is a preposition that is used to show the reason or goal of something. To is a preposition that is used to show the direction or destination of something. Using for is more suitable and logical than using to.
5, 6, and 8. Need to correct the spelling.
7. A comma is needed.
When I analise myself, I sometimes get too absorbed in works and become hesitant to delegate tasks to my colleagues. I think it is my biggest drawback. Reveiwing the process of the preparation for the exhibition, I should have relied more on my co-workers, because I took too many works on myself. If I had delegated some works to others, the prepareation would have been easier and better. I had a lesson and recognised my weakness from it, so I will improve immensely in project management and overcome the weakness.
When I analyze myself, I sometimes get too absorbed in work and become hesitant to delegate tasks to my colleagues. I think it is my biggest drawback. Reviewing the process of the preparation for the exhibition, I should have relied more on my co-workers, because I took too many tasks on myself. If I had delegated some tasks to others, the preparation would have been easier and better. I learned a lesson and recognized my weakness from it, so I will improve immensely in project management and overcome the weakness.
2. Use the singular form of work, because you are using it as an uncountable noun that means the activity or tasks that someone does as part of their job.
4 and 5. Use tasks instead of works, because you are talking about specific or individual pieces of work that someone has to do. Tasks is a plural noun that means a set of activities or duties that someone has to complete. Works is a plural noun that means a group of pieces of art, literature, or music that someone has created. Using tasks is more appropriate and specific than using works.
7. Use learned instead of had, because you are talking about gaining knowledge or skill from an experience. Learned is the past simple tense or the past participle of the verb to learn, which is used to describe an action that was completed or finished in the past or that has a connection with the present. Had is the past simple tense or the past participle of the verb to have, which is used to show possession, relationship, or existence. Using learned is more accurate and relevant than using had.
関連単語
- ambition（野心、熱望）
- intention（目的、意図）
- objective（目的、目標）
- envision（想像する、心に描く）
- planning（計画している、考えている）
- player（重要な役割の［影響力の大きい］人）
- contribute（貢献する）
- impact（影響（力））
- participate（加わる、分かち合う）
- influential（（名）影響力のある人（形）有力な、勢力のある、誘因となる）
関連フレーズ
- It has always been my ambition to be part of the leadership team of a company such as this.（御社のような会社でチームリーダーとして働くことは私の夢でした。）
- I know I can contribute to the success of this company.（御社の成功に貢献できると思います。）
- I want to be an influence in the future growth of this company.（今後の成長に影響を与える存在でありたいと思っています。）
- I envision this company to be in the top echelon of business within the next 5 years.（私は今後５年以内に、この会社が業界のトップレベルになることを想定しています。）
- I want to be a key player in the future growth of this company.（御社の成長のための中心的存在になりたいです。）
- My work ethic and determination to succeed will help to propel this company forward.（成功するための私の労働倫理と決断力は、きっと御社の推進力となって役立つでしょう。）
- I was the driving force of my previous company's success.（私は前会社での成功の立役者となっていました。）
- I hope to expand this company by opening branch offices throughout the world.（世界中に支社をオープンしてこの会社を拡大するつもりです。）
- I hope that my record and reputation as a team player will convince you that I am the right person.（私の業績と高い評価によって、チームのメンバーとして私がふさわしいということをあなたに証明できればと思います。）
- My only goal is to make this company second to none.（私のただ唯一の目的は、この会社を一番にすることです。）
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2. Need to correct the spelling of historical.
3. Use the plural form of ruins, because you are talking about more than one ruin. A ruin is a noun that means a damaged or decayed building or structure. Ruins is a plural noun that means a group of damaged or decayed buildings or structures. You need to use the plural form of a noun when you are talking about more than one thing.
4. Need to correct the spelling of experiences